Shops should not be allowed to sell any food or drink scientifically proven bad for people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Health is a crucial factor that is the major concern of each individual and government worldwide. Therefore, some people say that all categories of food or drink that have been proven by scientists to be harmful to human health should be banned from sale. In my opinion, I disagree with this viewpoint, and I will explain why in the following paragraphs.
First, people have the right to choose what type of food they like. There are various kinds of food which are assumed to be detrimental to human health, ranging from fast food and soft drinks to pastries, and according to numerous people, they have good taste and are delicious. If these foods were banned, life would be less enjoyable. Besides, almost everyone is aware of the consequences if they take too many of them. Some people cannot control themselves with an appropriate amount of these foods, which leads to suffering health problems. However, it does not mean that will happen to all people, so they do not deserve to be taken out of these treats from their lives. Secondly, we can deny their convenience in our lives. For example, students who are constantly preoccupied with their studies or workers who have little time to relax after a long day at work. To save their time, all they need to do is to put a package of food that is sold in any convenience store or market into their microwaves and enjoy it after 2 or 3 minutes. Finally, these food industries have created a large number of jobs and contribute to the economy with huge taxes.
Admittedly, these kinds of foods have a negative effect on our health. For example, eating too much fast food can lead to being overweight or even obese. However, with a suitable amount and combined with doing exercise regularly, those health issues will be alleviated.
In conclusion, limiting outlets that sell foods that have been scientifically proven to be bad for human health cannot address the health problem. Instead, the government should implement policies to promote public awareness campaigns about a healthy diet and lifestyle. That would be more efficient.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1087, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...lly, these food industries have created a large number of jobs and contribute to the economy with...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87078651685 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58550898471 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578651685393 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9393311276 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2631578947 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7368421053 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15789473684 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288631637848 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816466020198 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729986173543 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191660131104 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398622839808 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1087, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...lly, these food industries have created a large number of jobs and contribute to the economy with...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 356.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87078651685 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58550898471 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578651685393 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9393311276 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2631578947 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7368421053 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15789473684 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288631637848 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816466020198 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729986173543 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191660131104 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398622839808 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.