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The best way for parents to teach their children about responsibility is to have the children care for an animal.

The society has an increasing demand for responsible citizens.Unfortunately, not everyone is capable of carrying responsibilities. The cultivation of such ability involves a complicated range of elements, including patience, meticulous care and whole-hearted devotions. As a result, it is extremely necessary to teach children to be responsible before they grow up. Rising pets could be an effective way to achieve such a goal.
First of all, taking good care of others is a primary step to become responsible individual. Just like a baby who lives under the endless care from its mother, an animal also relies largely on the affectionate care from its owner. If a child has been given the chance to play a role of a little mother, she would have a further comprehension about what love and care really mean. She may be determined to render the greatest to her pet and try to make it healthier and stronger. In fact, such a psychological feedback is helpful to children’s mental growth and prepares them for greater responsibilities.
Secondly, during the course of pet-raising, children would realize difficulty in maintaining the responsibility. They would learn to cherish the hard work of their parents and become more considerate. Outwardly, taking care of a small animal appears to be a simple task. Only after assuming the duty could a child fully sense the difficulty in doing it well. Each step needs to be followed meticulously. He has to commit a series of complicated duties, including learning about habitual nature of the pet, preparing fro the suitable amount of food to feed it in time, doing cleaning and even playing with it. These may remind them of what parents would do while taking care of their child. It is likely for the little pet owner to thoroughly understand the hardships his parents have undergone to bring him up. Accordingly, he will try to respect and cherish the hard work of their parents more than before. This should be the sign of his progress toward maturity.
Moreover, raising pets allow children to experience the happiness of being devoted to others. No matter how many trouble they have encountered to feed their pets, these efforts shall never be made vainly. The process of care-taking fills them with enormous happiness. Evidently, the wholehearted devotion granted to animals makes children appreciate the real essences of happiness. They may also realize that being devoted to others could make one’s life both meaningful and joyful.
In belief, taking care of animal not only presents to children the nature of responsibility, but also lets them experience the difficulty and happiness of carrying responsibilities. Indeed, it is a long way to go before a person becomes a fully responsible individual. Parents should encourage their children to undertake such meaningful tasks at an early age.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Unfortunately
...reasing demand for responsible citizens.Unfortunately, not everyone is capable of carrying re...
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Line 3, column 11, Rule ID: DURING_THE_COURSE_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'during'.
Suggestion: during
...r greater responsibilities. Secondly, during the course of pet-raising, children would realize dif...
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Line 3, column 517, Rule ID: FOR_FRO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'for'?
Suggestion: for
...t habitual nature of the pet, preparing fro the suitable amount of food to feed it ...
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Line 4, column 109, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun trouble seems to be countable; consider using: 'many troubles'.
Suggestion: many troubles
... being devoted to others. No matter how many trouble they have encountered to feed their pet...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, well, while, as to, in fact, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2389.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1376344086 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10159720005 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537634408602 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 751.5 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7908112139 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4814814815 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2222222222 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96296296296 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345490114325 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783401605524 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538345232109 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195910691317 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448847038947 0.0645574589148 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, may, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, well, while, as to, in fact, as a result, first of all

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