It is more important for governments to spend money on improving Internet access than on improving public transportation.
Infrastructure, containing internet facilities, public transportation, light systems, and so on, plays a crucial role in determining residents’ living conditions and it counts as the main part of the financial expenditure of a government. Therefore, how to invest in different parts becomes a heated discussion. Some people suggest that governments should spend more money on improving internet access than on constructing public transportation like the subway. From my perspective, I agree with this idea because I think the internet contributes much more than public transportation in the development of either a city or a country today and it is the kind of infrastructure that governments should invest in due to its irreplaceable place and considerable cost.
What should be prioritized is the undoubted role that the internet plays in the development of a society in the internet era. In detail, the internet helps education through the pandemic by making online education possible, building a virtual classroom on it; shopping mode has also been renewed by those online shopping platforms, like Amazon and JD, making it possible for people to buy almost everything they need just by clicking, bring so much convenience to residents. In contrast, those areas that don’t have basic internet facilities are likely to be locked outside of the modern world. People living there cannot get the latest news from phones. cannot participate in universities’ classes during the period of pandemic and they still need to walk to markets to buy necessaries even though they are not in good health. There are too many examples that can be listed here to show the unique role of the internet.
Some people may argue that a good system of public transportation also can bring convenience to people. I don’t disagree with that but it is needed to be stressed that a convenient system of public transportation system doesn’t play an irreplaceable role in the development of a society like the internet since people can still go anywhere they what to go without public transportation system by various ways like riding bicycles, driving cars. The lack of public transportation cannot quarantine either a person or a society, which can be done by the lack of internet. Therefore, governments should invest more in internet access than in public transportation.
The unique and irreplaceable role of the internet makes it the worthiest infrastructure so I hold the view that governments should spend more money on internet access than on public transportation
- Leadership comes naturally one cannot learn to be a leader 70
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- When classmates or colleagues communicate about a project in person instead of by e mail they will produce better work for the project 90
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Cannot
...cannot get the latest news from phones. cannot participate in universities’ classes du...
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Line 7, column 197, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...net access than on public transportation
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, therefore, i think, in contrast, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2160.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29411764706 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19867496476 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485294117647 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.2476749785 48.9658058833 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.0 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73333333333 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352778901605 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130854161492 0.076458572812 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157092214252 0.0737576698707 213% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256442287728 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126500985053 0.0645574589148 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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