Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people argue that part-time job is not good for teenager and encourage them to do in such age is not actually better way. They cite that it hinders in their academic performance, and it will evolves anxiety and depression due to burden of work. However, I disagree with these people and believe that efficient ways that can parents encourage to their children to involve in part-time jobs for following two reasons.
To begin with, encouraging children to involve in part-time work is better things because it helps them to make more responsible from early age. For instance, when l was high school, my parents encourage me to do work at free time, rather than watching Television. Although that suggestions annoyed me at first, later it helps me to become responsible person. Indeed, I was able to handle my financial budget. If l did not made that decision, probably I might suffers from anxiety and depression. It is important to be a responsible person because it helps to gives strength to deal or tackle with real-life issues and so forth. Thus, persuading children at early age to do some work helps to make them responsible.
Furthermore, encouraging children to work at early young age helps to evolve their many skills. For example, once, I worked in restaurant in my early age may be 10 years back, when l was teenager. Despite overloaded work, I was able to develop various skills. Among those skills, one skill really change my career, that is how to behave with senior employee and customers. So, today I was exalted as CEO of company with my politeness and managing ability. It is crucial to develop skills in life because without skills we would not find any job and cannot succeed in life. Therefore, doing part-time job at teenagers helps to develop the life skills and refine it in later ages.
To sum up, the issues whether the parents should persuade their teenager children to encourage them to do part-time work for success in adult life is complex. Some people suggested that doing so at such early period may reduce their academic efficiency and may led to anxiety and depression due to burden of work. Nevertheless, I still contend that encouraging teenager children to take part-time job helps to make them not only responsible person, but also helps to develop practical skills to succeed in life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 197, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'evolve'
Suggestion: evolve
...their academic performance, and it will evolves anxiety and depression due to burden of...
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Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...andle my financial budget. If l did not made that decision, probably I might suffers...
^^^^
Line 3, column 561, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'give'.
Suggestion: give
... responsible person because it helps to gives strength to deal or tackle with real-li...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1961.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91478696742 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63344724228 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49373433584 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7147028547 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.05 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.95 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328760560845 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106971989511 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102619843172 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238635290566 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815900852295 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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