Technology and society
The mass media and the internet have helped billions of people around the globe to connect with one another, which makes it easy to pass important information within minutes. Despite this, it has also caused a lot of harm, which is the reason why I mostly disagree with the author that while people are less able to focus on one thing due to mass media and the internet, they make up for it with an enhanced ability to sort through large quantities of information and find what is important based on four reasons, which I will be discussing in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, In the process of trying to get important information on the internet, one could be carried away or distracted by something else that may seem appealing to one. For instance, Mabel seeks to get some important information on some websites that she needs to complete an assignment that will be due in two days' time, in the process of gathering that information, she stumbled on a website that contains the information she needs and ads of different shoes, because Mabel loves shoes, she will definitely click the link that leads to the page where the shoes are being sold, after perusing the website for a very long time, she just keeps seeing more and more things she likes, and she eventually forgot for quite a long time on her primary purpose of checking the internet, this shows that it is easy to lose one focus when using the internet.
Secondly, A lot of time could be wasted and one could end up bored when trying to sort through large quantities of information, which could lead to the truncation of the build-up of the enhanced ability to sort large quantities of information to locate those that are important. For instance, Sangchi desires to know the right foods that will cause his body to be developed better, while looking through the internet he got a lot of information on what he could be doing, the kinds of food he should be eating to develop better, in the process of sifting the wheat from the dirt, he had almost spent the whole day, and he had not gotten adequate information on all he needs, he will have to stop after some time to do something else. He will have saved a lot of time and stress if had just paid a visit to his doctor instead of using up so much time with getting all he needs.
Thirdly, The internet improves one ability to check out multiple things almost at the same time, but this also may result in the ability one to focus on one thing to reduce. For instance, someone that is used to juggling between multiple sites at the same time searching for different things might end up missing out on the most important points and information, and it will be difficult for the person to follow one trail of information path.
Lastly, the media and the internet play a major role in development and enhancement, but it has to be adequately managed with rules in place. For instance, the example of Mabel which I gave in the first paragraph of this write-up, would have been able to focus on her assignment if she had personal rules that she obeys, that does not allow her to move to something else except she has completed the task that she has been given per time.
In conclusion, with these few points of mine, I have shown the extent to which I disagree with the claims of the author, by supporting my position with three points which are In the process of trying to get important information on the internet, one could be carried away or distracted by something else that may seem appealing to one, A lot of time could be wasted and one could end up bored when trying to sort through large quantities of information, which could lead to the truncation of the build-up of the enhanced ability to sort large quantities of information to locate those that are important and I can not deny the fact that the internet can also help enhance the ability of humans to focus on one thing if it is properly managed.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 29.0 11.3162921348 256% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 126.0 58.6224719101 215% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3238.0 2235.4752809 145% => OK
No of words: 711.0 442.535393258 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55414908579 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.16377606524 4.55969084622 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45795308912 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.386779184248 0.4932671777 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1015.2 704.065955056 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 59.0 23.0359550562 256% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 196.716572058 60.3974514979 326% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 269.833333333 118.986275619 227% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 59.25 23.4991977007 252% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 10.75 5.21951772744 206% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.243740707755 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0831039109588 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0758088955206 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150359130593 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667264976115 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.6 14.1392134831 209% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 28.51 48.8420337079 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.9 12.1743820225 196% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.0 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 11.8971910112 227% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 25.6 11.2143820225 228% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 11.7820224719 255% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 29.0 11.3162921348 256% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 65.0 33.0505617978 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 126.0 58.6224719101 215% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3238.0 2235.4752809 145% => OK
No of words: 711.0 442.535393258 161% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55414908579 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.16377606524 4.55969084622 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45795308912 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.386779184248 0.4932671777 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1015.2 704.065955056 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 59.0 23.0359550562 256% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 196.716572058 60.3974514979 326% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 269.833333333 118.986275619 227% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 59.25 23.4991977007 252% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 10.75 5.21951772744 206% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.243740707755 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0831039109588 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0758088955206 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150359130593 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667264976115 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.6 14.1392134831 209% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 28.51 48.8420337079 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.9 12.1743820225 196% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.0 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 11.8971910112 227% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 25.6 11.2143820225 228% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 11.7820224719 255% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.