“Over the past few years, the number of women leaving the workforce to stay at home with their children has increased by 47%. More mothers’ are exploring this option because they dislike dropping their children off at daycare. Therefore, if companies wish to retain these mothers as employees, they should build onsite daycare centers”.
A national news station recently reported that, if the companies wish to retain mothers as employees ,they should build onsite daycare centers: more mothers are leaving the workforce to stay at home as they dislike dropping their children to daycare and more mothers are exploring this option. However, before evaluating above recommendation three questions need to be answered.
Firstly, do the salary of mother could afford the daycare centers expenses ? In other words, does mother salary could defray the daycare outlays? Perhaps, the mother salary might be less than the total outlays of daycare of their children which might had create the pressure to manage the total outlays.probably, the fee structure of daycare may be such that;mothers’ need to to clear the fee during the time of admission. If these scenario has merit, the condition drawn in orginal argument is considerably weakened.
Secondly, does the daycare keep the children with cosset? It is potential, that may be the staff working in the daycare centers are remiss and may be they are insouciance about the different timing of children especially fooding, sleeping, time. May be, staff are not sure: food which they serve to the children might not be fresh cooked .May be the number of children in the daycare are large enough crossing its average capacity such that staff could not concentrate the children and their activities and they might cause minor accidents. If these above conditions hold true ,the orginal argument doesn’t hold water.
Finally, is the daycare centre near from their home and workplace? Perhaps, the distance from daycare center and the home might be a kind long route may be in a range of 5miles and ; it might be a hectic for them to take children to the daycare from home and from daycare they need to return to workplace and again viceversa. In addition to many mothers’ might not have the their own private vehicle and and going through public buses and train might be dilatory and they might be late with their job .If these conditions hold true, the original argument seems to be weakened.
In conclusion , the argument, stands out to be considerably flawed, due to its reliance on several unstated assumptions .if the author is able to answers the above three questions and offer more evidences (perhaps, through systematic research study),then it will be fully possible to evaluate the feasibility of the proposed recommendations to build onsite daycare centers to retain these mothers’ as employees.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 415 350
No. of Characters: 2041 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.513 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.918 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.502 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.643 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.145 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.365 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nies wish to retain mothers as employees ,they should build onsite daycare centers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, in addition, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 412.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1213592233 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66974902904 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504854368932 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.119879683 57.8364921388 197% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.714285714 119.503703932 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4285714286 23.324526521 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 5.70786347227 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 5.25449101796 571% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255668515207 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.098876896029 0.0743258471296 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113111182191 0.0701772020484 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166918826641 0.128457276422 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125441635206 0.0628817314937 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.3799401198 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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