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Students could recieve a better, more effecient education if they spent 11 months a year studying.

Some might think that making students learn 11 months in a year will increase efficiency in learning, but I disagree for two reasons. One is that students will be tired after 11 months, and the other is that the best education doesn't come from school.

To begin with, no single person can withhold 11 straight months of learning. A normal school year lasts 8 months, and an extra 3 months cut from vacation will make students restless and rebellious. For example, if one lets a teacher work 50 hours a week, the teacher will be tired and quit the job. The teacher hardly resists the temptation to get some rest, and therefore, the efficiency will be not higher but lower. A teacher who can work for 30 hours a week instead of 40 hours will be more energetic and efficient in teaching and therefore, has better results than the other teacher who works for 50 hours a week.

Secondly, knowledge comes from every single part of life from playing games to chatting, not just school alone. What's more, the knowledge harvested from communication with others is more important than the math and English learned in school. For example, life morals can be learned from witnessing heroic acts, and it is not at all similar to the stories heard in school. There's a saying that goes,"what you hear from others is fake, and what you see with your own eyes is true." What is heard in school is fake, but what is seen is true. Education in school is not so important, but lessons learned in the outside world are.

To sum up, I disagree with making students learn for 11 months a year because it does not have efficiency, and because it is not so important compared to what is learned in the outside world.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 43.0788530466 28% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 305.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60983606557 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4593311274 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501639344262 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 397.8 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2796501878 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.153846154 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4615384615 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07692307692 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140967212654 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598223551185 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554869698873 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108966373611 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569691404473 0.0645574589148 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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