Students could receive a better, more efficient education if they spend 11 months a year studing.
It is tempting to think the more time a student spends on his studies, the better an education he/she can hope to receive.
However, I hold the opposite opinion that it is impossible for a student to get a better education by excessively studying for 11 months a year. More
Schooling does not necessarily equate a better education as education encompasses a rich array of aspects other than simply knowledge from textbooks.
An extended period of study contributes very little to better education.
It has been reported that people cannot focus on one thing for more than a few hours at a time. If they force themselves to stretch their attention span, then their physical condition deteriorates, leading to a decline in efficiency and productivity, be it at work or at study.
It is not surprising, for example, that a skilled flutist might have difficulty in controlling her armature and overall posture for hours without drifting her focus to other less important things, like the hot
guy in the trumpet section. A programmer, however skillful in coding, could not tease out a single bug after spending more than ten hours in
front of the computer.
Similarly, if students were forced to sit in the classroom for more than the regular school year of 8 months, listening to monotonous lectures one after another, they would soon become exhausted and even rebellious to such an unreasonable arrangement. They will become absent-minded in class and slack off on homework assignments.
In contrast, if students take several months off after a regular semester of intense work they can charge their batteries and return to the next semester, more engaged and rejuvenated.
The second reason for my stance is that the best education occurs outside of school.
A several-month long summer break, for example, will allow students to go outside of their typical environment and to get in touch with the real world. They gain the opportunities to travel and socialize with people they usually would’ interact with. These meaningful experiences offer an education that students could never hope to receive at school.
I once met a person during my summer vacation who was volunteering at a non-profit organization aimed at helping children from less privileged families. She sacrificed a high-paying job offer from a multinational company to devote her time wholeheartedly to helping those children. The encounter made me realize the power of dreams and how certain aspirations can motivate a person to leave behind materialistic desires, such as a stable job.
Another example is a boy whom I met in Beijing. He was brought up in an orphanage as he lost his parents at an early age. But he remained optimistic
and always wore the biggest smile on his face. We chatted and joked often. His sunny nature taught me that true happiness lies not in one's circumstances, but in one's state of mind. No matter how meager lives we lead, a simple smile can keep us happy from within. Those are precious lessons that I have stayed with me to this day.
If I hadn't gone on vacation, I would have missed the education of a lifetime and become a very different person today.
Therefore, 11 months of education per year amounts to an evil plan. I would encourage students to take breaks and take them often.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vely studying for 11 months a year. More Schooling does not necessarily equate a ...
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Line 10, column 210, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ther less important things, like the hot guy in the trumpet section. A programmer...
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Line 11, column 141, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ug after spending more than ten hours in front of the computer. Similarly, if...
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Line 25, column 135, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ught me that true happiness lies not in ones circumstances, but in ones state of min...
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Line 25, column 162, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... lies not in ones circumstances, but in ones state of mind. No matter how meager liv...
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Line 27, column 6, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...ve stayed with me to this day. If I hadnt gone on vacation, I would have missed t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, similarly, so, then, therefore, for example, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2776.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 555.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0018018018 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84543242318 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 314.0 212.727598566 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565765765766 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 867.6 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6132693749 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1428571429 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8214285714 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 17.0 4.53405017921 375% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295889107254 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656686741512 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748771460024 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0912399915697 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0853250998503 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vely studying for 11 months a year. More Schooling does not necessarily equate a ...
^^^
Line 10, column 210, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ther less important things, like the hot guy in the trumpet section. A programmer...
^^^
Line 11, column 141, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ug after spending more than ten hours in front of the computer. Similarly, if...
^^^
Line 25, column 135, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ught me that true happiness lies not in ones circumstances, but in ones state of min...
^^^^
Line 25, column 162, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... lies not in ones circumstances, but in ones state of mind. No matter how meager liv...
^^^^
Line 27, column 6, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...ve stayed with me to this day. If I hadnt gone on vacation, I would have missed t...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, similarly, so, then, therefore, for example, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2776.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 555.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0018018018 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84543242318 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 314.0 212.727598566 148% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565765765766 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 867.6 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6132693749 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1428571429 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8214285714 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 17.0 4.53405017921 375% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295889107254 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656686741512 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748771460024 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0912399915697 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0853250998503 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.