The following appeared in a memorandum from the owner of Movies Galore, a chain of movie-rental stores.
"Because of declining profits, we must reduce operating expenses at Movies Galore's ten movie-rental stores. Raising prices is not a good option, since we are famous for our low prices. Instead, we should reduce our operating hours. Last month our store in downtown Marston reduced its hours by closing at 6:00 p.m. rather than 9:00 p.m. and reduced its overall inventory by no longer stocking any DVD released more than five years ago. Since we have received very few customer complaints about these new policies, we should now adopt them at all other Movies Galore stores as our best strategies for improving profits."
From the given argument we can understand that profits for theatre are getting reduced.
The reason for decline of profits was mentioned in the argument.
In order to get more profits the owner decides to reduce operating hours at movies galore rather than increasing the ticket prices as movies galore is famous for low prices.one assumption we can make here is profits are low because of low ticket prices.Apart from that reducing the operating hours may lead decline of profits further more as people prefer to watch movies at different times.
Owner also took a decision to not stock the DVD released five years ago.From this decision also movie galore may head towards losses as people of different ages come and watch the movies.People in olden age especially prefer to watch old movies which they are fond of.
Therefore people might stop coming to movies galore gradually.
Apart from that people dropped complaints to management regarding new changes made by movies galore.So it’s clearly evident that not all are satisfied with rules of movies galore
This can lead to more losses
However,decisions made by owner of movies galore may be profitable if people are open to change by movies galore
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 254, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Apart
...ts are low because of low ticket prices.Apart from that reducing the operating hours ...
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Line 4, column 340, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ay lead decline of profits further more as people prefer to watch movies at differ...
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Line 6, column 73, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: From
...t stock the DVD released five years ago.From this decision also movie galore may hea...
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Line 6, column 188, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: People
...ifferent ages come and watch the movies.People in olden age especially prefer to watch...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...tch old movies which they are fond of. Therefore people might stop coming to movies galo...
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Line 9, column 101, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...rding new changes made by movies galore.So it’s clearly evident that not all are s...
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Line 9, column 179, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re satisfied with rules of movies galore This can lead to more losses However...
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Line 10, column 29, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es galore This can lead to more losses However,decisions made by owner of movie...
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Line 12, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , decisions
...This can lead to more losses However,decisions made by owner of movies galore may be p...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 11.1786427146 9% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1024.0 2260.96107784 45% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 200.0 441.139720559 45% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 4.56307096286 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53771550809 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 204.123752495 55% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565 0.468620217663 121% => OK
syllable_count: 325.8 705.55239521 46% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 134.038551668 57.8364921388 232% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 170.666666667 119.503703932 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.3333333333 23.324526521 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.70786347227 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368991776032 0.218282227539 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17746935065 0.0743258471296 239% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959291814361 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160070957509 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106130083717 0.0628817314937 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 14.3799401198 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 98.500998004 44% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 254, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Apart
...ts are low because of low ticket prices.Apart from that reducing the operating hours ...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 340, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ay lead decline of profits further more as people prefer to watch movies at differ...
^^
Line 6, column 73, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: From
...t stock the DVD released five years ago.From this decision also movie galore may hea...
^^^^
Line 6, column 188, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: People
...ifferent ages come and watch the movies.People in olden age especially prefer to watch...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...tch old movies which they are fond of. Therefore people might stop coming to movies galo...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 101, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...rding new changes made by movies galore.So it’s clearly evident that not all are s...
^^
Line 9, column 179, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re satisfied with rules of movies galore This can lead to more losses However...
^^^
Line 10, column 29, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es galore This can lead to more losses However,decisions made by owner of movie...
^^^^^
Line 12, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , decisions
...This can lead to more losses However,decisions made by owner of movies galore may be p...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 11.1786427146 9% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 55.5748502994 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1024.0 2260.96107784 45% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 200.0 441.139720559 45% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 4.56307096286 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53771550809 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 204.123752495 55% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565 0.468620217663 121% => OK
syllable_count: 325.8 705.55239521 46% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 134.038551668 57.8364921388 232% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 170.666666667 119.503703932 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.3333333333 23.324526521 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.70786347227 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368991776032 0.218282227539 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17746935065 0.0743258471296 239% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959291814361 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160070957509 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106130083717 0.0628817314937 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 14.3799401198 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.197005988 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 98.500998004 44% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.