Choosing between the advantages and disadvantages that technology has on the modern society is of course a trivial one. It is not uncommon for an individual to ponder over this argument for a long time, and after coming to a conclusion, still doubts his or her stand. The prompt suggests that technology brought about by the increasing needs of man has brought about more problems than it solves. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this suggestion and argue that technology has done more harm than good for two reasons.
To begin with, the world as it is now encounters more pollution than it has witnessed before the invention of technology. For example, before the invention of technology about 1000 years ago, just a little amount of carbon dioxide was emitted from sources such as burning of woods and other materials. Immediately after the revolution of technology, industries starting adding to this little amount of carbon dioxide been expelled from burning of coals, vehicle emissions, mining operations, among others. This emission has in turn led to several world problems such as the depletion of the ozone layer, death of humans and animals. With this, the world is now considering moving away from the technological innovation due to the hazards it threatens the environment with. This example illustrate the negative impact that technology has brought to man and its environment instead of making life easier.
Furthermore, the invention of technology has brought about the downfall of man in terms of unemployment. It can be noticed that during the beginning of the 21st century, big nations starting manufacturing robots trained by humans in order to ease the affair of man. Rather than bring about a positive change, robots are instead taking the jobs of man, and making thousands of individual out of job. The effect of this is poverty, which is one of the goals that the world at a time were coming together to solve. According to research, unemployment leads to negative activities in the society, among which includes; suicide, robbery, kidnapping. This illustration states clearly that the action of man in inventing technology, has brought inconveniences to man rather than make life easier.
Some would argue that since the world shifts toward technological development, that everyone should endeavour to move in that direction. Are the issues relating to the negative impact of technological development not one of the reasons why we should go for courses that would rather help rectify the problems rather than continue in this path? With the stated reasons above, itvis clear that technology has brought more danger than peace to the world at large.
- Topic Technology causes more problems for modern societies than it solves 66
- Our school is the best choice for students considering a career in theatre First our school does not require an audition and encourages applicants of all acting experience levels to apply Second our students are trained in all major schools of acting meth 68
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 787, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'illustrates'.
Suggestion: illustrates
...tens the environment with. This example illustrate the negative impact that technology has...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, still, for example, of course, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2250.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 438.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13698630137 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79053346156 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520547945205 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.7493729809 60.3974514979 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 118.421052632 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0526315789 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68421052632 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230604683593 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729816191778 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619041594683 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161055669752 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0984425940026 0.0667264976115 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 787, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'illustrates'.
Suggestion: illustrates
...tens the environment with. This example illustrate the negative impact that technology has...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, still, for example, of course, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2250.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 438.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13698630137 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79053346156 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520547945205 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.7493729809 60.3974514979 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 118.421052632 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0526315789 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68421052632 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230604683593 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729816191778 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619041594683 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161055669752 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0984425940026 0.0667264976115 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.