The author believes that his/her school ranks highest for students thinking of getting a career in theatre. This conclusion was drawn from evidences that the school does not require any form of audition and urges all acting experience level applicants, also, the author claims that all students of the school are trained in all major schools of acting, and that many of the school's graduates are getting roles in briadway productios and hollywod films. However, in order to accept the validity of the conclusion, three questions must be answeres.
Firstly, is it possible that graduates of the school went ahead to receive higher acting degrees from other schools before landing big jobs in the acting space? In other way, it is possible for graduates of the school to have gone to further sharpen their acting skills by going to other schools where they specialize in a particular genre of acting. For instance, a student might complete a program in year 2005, abd go further to another acting school in 2006, to get a different and specialized knowledge in his or her own genre (bollywood) of acting which interests him. If this question holds true, then, the conclusion does not hold water.
Secondly, is it possible that graduates of the school are only doig well in broadway productions and hollywod films? That is, does it mean that other genre of acting are not considered when evaluating for the best school of acting? It is possible that graduates of the schol, despite been taught all genre of acting, may have been taught the broadway productions and hollywood films aspect very well, in such a way that they have very little knowledge about the other aspects of acting. For example, the achool might have dedicated 95% of their syllabus to broadway and hollywood films, giving 5% to the remaining type of acting major. With this, the students of the school will be good in broadway and hollywood films, while they act poorly in other aspects of acting. If this question proves valid, then the argument is not valid.
Furthermore, does it mean that the school will acquire a significant number of students that are willing and ready to excel in the acting industry? The author assumes that since the school doesn't require auditioning of students, it is possible to get a large number of students that are enthusiastic about their acting career. It is possible, however that most of the student detest acting, but only apply to the school in order to go away from their houses. As an illustration, some of the applicants might have intentions of studying medicine, but due to the fact that they are not being picked by the best medical schools in their vicinity, and they want to leave their houses because other children also left, might have prompted them to apply. If such students is picked, there is a high possibility that such a student might not excel, as with that, drops the rate of success of the school. If this question proves true, then it undermines the argument.
The argument as it stands is flawed, as a result of unwarranted assumptions. However, if the author can provide answers to the questions above, probably by carrying out more research and data acquisition, it will be possible to evaluate the validity of the argument and thus leaves the school as the best in choice for a career in the theatre.
- Topic Technology causes more problems for modern societies than it solves 66
- Our school is the best choice for students considering a career in theatre First our school does not require an audition and encourages applicants of all acting experience levels to apply Second our students are trained in all major schools of acting meth 68
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 574 350
No. of Characters: 2695 1500
No. of Different Words: 237 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.895 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.695 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.425 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 195 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.149 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.81 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 69, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (doig) must be used with a third-person verb: 'wells'.
Suggestion: wells
...t graduates of the school are only doig well in broadway productions and hollywod fi...
^^^^
Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...he author assumes that since the school doesnt require auditioning of students, it is ...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 252, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ning of students, it is possible to get a large number of students that are enthusiastic about th...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 480, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... from their houses. As an illustration, some of the applicants might have intentions of stu...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 28.8173652695 177% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 55.5748502994 148% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2772.0 2260.96107784 123% => OK
No of words: 572.0 441.139720559 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84615384615 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89045207381 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49863281116 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 204.123752495 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442307692308 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 819.9 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.5591082247 57.8364921388 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.0 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2380952381 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.80952380952 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365344205506 0.218282227539 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115820551646 0.0743258471296 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0962252889118 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222504595647 0.128457276422 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0912227637318 0.0628817314937 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 48.3550499002 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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