Undeniable, if people do not obey traditions in their families or communities, it may lead to discontent, misunderstanding or even resentment from their families. Led by this fact, some credulous people generate the opinion that everyone must follow traditions even if those traditions do not match their own preference. However, before reaching a conclusion, a conscientious examination should be conducted. When it comes to social development, mental health, and interpersonal relationship, I firmly believe that we should follow our own preference in future development.
First, most of the traditions and customs are not in line with modern development trends of society. These customs were created dozens or even hundreds of years ago, while with the rapid progress of globalization on the basis of technological development, we now live in a much faster-paced and more diverse world, which is completely different from the era when our parents and grandparents were born. The old ideology was created to serve for the old order, like feudalism or slavery. However, since we always keep up with the development of society, our preferences and choices are more suitable for the rapid-paced world. As a result, we ought to make decisions for ourselves and integrate into this new society, rather than following those out-dating customs.
Second, obeying traditions but ignoring personal interest would cause severe mental problems, since people cannot get what they really want. To take the case of my friends Teddy, a typical 25 years old young people with an engineering Bachelor degree, he went back to his hometown after graduating due to the tradition of his family that everyone in the family must live together. Because his family lived in a small village with few industries, Teddy could not find a job that fitted his specialty, and ended up driving trucks transporting grain. However, his dream was always becoming an excellent engineer and working in a big company. As a result, after going back to his family, he fell into depression very soon and there was no smile on his face any more. If he could make the choice for himself, he would likely have become an outstanding engineer and keep upbeat forever just like in the collage.
A voice arises that if we resist traditions, our relatives will not understand us, and it is probably bring distance between family members. Ironically, if we always follow these out-dating customs, we may lose more friends and it is detrimental to our interpersonal relationship. We may have to move to a new city, find a job that we are not interested in, or have a strange habit. People may think we are strange. Then we cannot maintain our social relationship well. Meanwhile, what we should do is helping our family step into the new society and abolish those old customs, and then we can keep a tight family relationship and do what we actually want to at the same time.
In conclusion, considering social development, mental health, and interpersonal relationship, I strongly hold the opinion that we ought to resist those traditions that do not meet our own preferences.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 103, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'brought'.
Suggestion: brought
...l not understand us, and it is probably bring distance between family members. Ironic...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, then, well, while, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2627.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11089494163 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96084725229 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527237354086 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 823.5 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.51792114695 341% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.1211985307 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.409090909 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3636363636 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77272727273 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220074892427 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675751642132 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875163209994 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144710369285 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10745880949 0.0645574589148 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 103, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'brought'.
Suggestion: brought
...l not understand us, and it is probably bring distance between family members. Ironic...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, then, well, while, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2627.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 514.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11089494163 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96084725229 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527237354086 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 823.5 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.51792114695 341% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.1211985307 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.409090909 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3636363636 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77272727273 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220074892427 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675751642132 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875163209994 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144710369285 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10745880949 0.0645574589148 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.