I feel that young people enjoy life more than older people do. I feel this way for two reasons which we will examine in the following essay.
First of all, young people have more physical strength, flexibility and energy in their bodies when compared to older people. Therefore, if someone travels to a physically demanding place, naturally young people would be in a better state to explore the place and enjoy it more than older people. For example, my family and I went to a relogious place named Ambaji in Gujarat. The temple of the goddess is located on the peak of a mountain. There are two ways to get up there, stairs carved into stones and ropeway. The route by the stairs is famous and recommended for its scenic beauty and classic historical monuments build along the route. As my parents and I were young enough to climb, we took the stairs and we really enjoyed what it had to offer. On the other hand, my grandparents are old and took the ropeway to reach the temple located on the peak, but they really missed the scenic route and glance of historical monuments. By this experience I can say young people have an advantage while travelling and can enjoy more.
Secondly, talking about the financial risks, young people usually don't have family to feed. While the older person might have a spouse and a couple of children. Generally taking risk is vaible for younger people people becuase if something goes wrong they don't have burden of their family who can also suffer from this. For example, a person who is not married will be more relaxed while taking a risk to leave his existing job to start a new business of his own. Because ,though, it dosn't wrok out in the end, he is the only one who will be suffered. In contrast, a older person who have his own family, will not only be worried about the business failing but also about what happens to their family members. In this situation a younger person will be in a better state to find a solution and succed by learning from it. I will go on to create more wealth and be happy. While a older person don't want to take this type pf risk and keeps himself busy and satisfied in his day to day job.
Because of the above mentioned reason, I think a young person would enjoy more in his life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, i feel, i think, in contrast, talking about, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47342995169 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24481271193 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497584541063 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3190570371 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1904761905 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162428616972 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551496674642 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762764423403 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134555713653 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671556269622 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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