The author of the above statement proposes that, in a study conducted in Hollyland by University of Sunnyland that the residents of the place were asked to choose their favourite music were most of them opt for country. But, a survey conducted in the same country regarding the most downloaded song, they found it to be most popular genre. So, when we look close into the given statement, the proofs provided by the author are not sufficient to corroborate the statement and they are also not logical.
Firstly, the author of the statement does not provided the proof about the areas or the habits people follow were those two survey’s were conducted. Because depending on the areas were people are living the music habits may change. Also, the music habits depends on the type of people living there. For instance, in our country south Indians mostly prefer mass music over melody but north Indians attract towards melody and pop. So, the author must have examined the statement properly and then might have come up with the conclusion.
Secondly, the stated notion also does not tell us about the people who have voted their favourite music are male or female. The gender plays a vital role in terms of music because male listeners might get attracted towards fast beat songs and where as women might not. Not only gender, favouite music also depends on the mood of the person and in what situation he is. Therefore, the author must have explored more about this variables and specifying the gender would have supported his statement.
Thirdly, the author did not supply information about the year of conduct of the survey. In terms of music, people’s mind always changes every year when a new album releases. So, specifying the year of conduct of the survey might have added extra support to the statement. The author also assumes that the people of Hollyland are not faithful towards their music habits. The author, without exploring the necessary things should not blame people because when the first survey was conducted, a new album might have released and people might have got attracted to it. When the second survey was conducted people might have changed their opinion towards other type of music.
At last, the hypothesis provided by the author seems to be insufficient to support the argument stated and also there are many unexplored variables were the author must answer many questions which remained unclear. Without assuming, the author might have come up with the supportive proofs to corroborate and to make the statement coherent.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 429 350
No. of Characters: 2079 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.551 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.846 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.278 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.45 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.866 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.566 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.143 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 47, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
...y, the author of the statement does not provided the proof about the areas or the habits...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 150, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...were those two survey’s were conducted. Because depending on the areas were people are ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 244, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...t attracted towards fast beat songs and where as women might not. Not only gender, favou...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 422, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...he author must have explored more about this variables and specifying the gender wou...
^^^^
Line 7, column 566, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... people might have got attracted to it. When the second survey was conducted people ...
^^^^
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e and to make the statement coherent.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2144.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 429.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99766899767 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35327817762 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484848484848 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8801563989 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.2 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.45 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189232664363 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675496547883 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769081823173 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111877380202 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0877863933427 0.0628817314937 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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