The author in the reading passage puts forward three solutions that may help protect rhinos from being hunted for horns. Despite agreeing with the idea of saving rhinos, the lecturer points out some flaws in the writer's proposals.
First, the professor casts doubt on the possibility that rhino horns can be directly removed by wildlife experts to make them less attractive to poachers. She mentions the process of finding rhinos in the wild, preparing them for surgeries and removing their horns can take a considerable amount of time and resources. However, even if dehorning is plausible, it will reduce rhinos' chance for survival in wild life since their horns are necessary in finding food and protecting their family. Therefore, this solution is impractical and only creates disadvantages for rhinos’ survival.
Another suggestion in the reading states that consumers can be educated about the untrue benefits of rhino horns to stop buying it. Again, the lecturer addresses this point when she says that it only works for people who haven't had a strong idea on rhino horns' health value. On the other hand, most consumers will be very unlikely to be affected by any scientific evidence as they already possess a strong ancient belief on health benefits brought by the horns, which has deeply rooted since thousands of years ago.
Finally, the lecture feels that it will be unpredictable to legalize government sales of rhino horn. If governments started to sell rhino horns, it would make more people think that buying this kind of product is acceptable, which would consequentially encourage the trade of rhino horn to flourish. The more people demand to purchase rhino horns, the larger the market will expand and their price will soon rocket. As a result, not only do the poachers not lose interest in hunting rhinos, but they will continue their illegal work for the large and lucrative market.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 222, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
... says that it only works for people who havent had a strong idea on rhino horns health...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, kind of, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 314.0 270.72406181 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09872611465 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51482883544 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 145.348785872 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605095541401 0.540411800872 112% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8719844995 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.153846154 110.228320801 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1538461538 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 7.06452816374 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.3589403974 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.42419426049 110% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 63.6247240618 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 222, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
... says that it only works for people who havent had a strong idea on rhino horns health...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, kind of, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 314.0 270.72406181 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09872611465 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51482883544 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 145.348785872 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605095541401 0.540411800872 112% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8719844995 49.2860985944 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.153846154 110.228320801 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1538461538 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 7.06452816374 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.3589403974 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.42419426049 110% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 63.6247240618 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.