In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard on their studies
What do you think are the causes of this?
What solutions can you suggest?
With the advancement of technology and the economy, students in almost all countries are subjected to a great deal of pressure, leaving them with little free time. They are, in my opinion, under a lot of pressure, which is the root of the problem. First is parental pressure, and second is competition for university places.
Every parent in the world wants to see their children have a successful career and do well in school. This means they exert an invisible pressure on their children to be successful, and it makes them spend hours each day studying and working. If they are of school age, they must attend school for 8 hours per day, and in my country, they must attend extra classes outside of school to improve their studies even further, and they must complete their homework when they return home. So, they do not have any leisure time to relax or for their hobbies.
The second cause is to reach the higher education system. Today, there are numerous universities of various types, including private universities and community colleges. But almost all parents want their children to have a place in famous universities. This contributes to the pressure on teenagers, since they must work long hours to have any chance of success.
The first solution is for parents to become aware of the effect of the pressure they have on their children. They should share more with their children in order to understand the burden that their pressures place on them and to become more empathetic with them. They should spend and help their children have more leisure time to relax and improve their children's and parents' connections.
The second solution is with the government, which should invest in the creation of more university places. This could be done by expanding the existing universities or building new ones. This would help reduce the competition for a place in university by giving teenagers more leisure time to improve their soft skills and their hobbies.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, well, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95495495495 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53510731754 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489489489489 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.317928235 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0588235294 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5882352941 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76470588235 7.06120827912 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181607509015 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697495382753 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445549812352 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105531573952 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.017861473801 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, well, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 333.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95495495495 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53510731754 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489489489489 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.317928235 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0588235294 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5882352941 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76470588235 7.06120827912 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181607509015 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697495382753 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0445549812352 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105531573952 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.017861473801 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.