The chart shows the proportion of working age adults in four countries from 1960 to 2050 Units are given in percentages Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant Write at least 150 words

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The chart shows the proportion of working age adults in four countries from 1960 to 2050. Units are given in percentages.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

The chart gives informations about the rate of people in working age 4 different countries over the period of 90 years since 1960.
Overall, the percentage of workforce in all mentioned nations witnessed a fluctuation between 1960 and 2020. In additions, it is predicted to falling during the next 30 years.
Looking at the chart for more details, it can be seen, that the rate of Japan's worker had high point at 65% in 1960, it climbed steadily and hit the peak at 70% over 30 years later. However, after getting the highest point, it had plunge and is likely to remain this slump until the year 2050. The similar was true for Germany .This figure just waved and climax at the same percentage with Japan in 1990 and then it to maybe continue to fall to 2050 .
About these others, the rate of France and US’ laborforce also saw a drop, but from 1960 to 1990 there was from a minimal rise in these number and then these figures slipped back until 2020 .Furthermore, calculations reveal that the percentage will decline in the next 30 years.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, then, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 860.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59893048128 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37765362463 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 106.607317073 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641711229947 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 247.5 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.5233702322 43.030603864 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.857142857 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7142857143 22.9334400587 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.85714285714 5.23603664747 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154860619541 0.215688989381 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668469130498 0.103423049105 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483816625777 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0931578388539 0.15604864568 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458676067527 0.0819641961636 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.2329268293 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.47 61.2550243902 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...r 2050. The similar was true for Germany .This figure just waved and climax at the...
^^
Line 3, column 328, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...2050. The similar was true for Germany .This figure just waved and climax at the sam...
^^^^
Line 3, column 449, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...hen it to maybe continue to fall to 2050 . About these others, the rate of France...
^^
Line 4, column 58, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s, the rate of France and US’ laborforce also saw a drop, but from 1960 to 1990 ...
^^
Line 4, column 80, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...and US’ laborforce also saw a drop, but from 1960 to 1990 there was from a minim...
^^
Line 4, column 192, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...en these figures slipped back until 2020 .Furthermore, calculations reveal that th...
^^
Line 4, column 193, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Furthermore
... these figures slipped back until 2020 .Furthermore, calculations reveal that the percentag...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, then, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 860.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59893048128 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37765362463 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 106.607317073 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641711229947 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 247.5 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.5233702322 43.030603864 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.857142857 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7142857143 22.9334400587 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.85714285714 5.23603664747 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154860619541 0.215688989381 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668469130498 0.103423049105 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483816625777 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0931578388539 0.15604864568 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458676067527 0.0819641961636 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.2329268293 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.47 61.2550243902 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.