The provided diagram depict information about the the propotion of people who belong to the 14 to 50 age group in a nation during the period between 1978 and 2008
It is evident that the percentage of cinema visitors insubstantially declined from 1078 to 2008, while the number of population who went to the cinema obviously increased
An inspection of the data in the first diagram clearly show among all the figure, the highet was obeserved in 1978, which belonged to youngsters.In the first of the period, the quantity of people in early adulthood was as twice as than population more than 50 years old when it peaked at 90%. Cinema visitors of the middle aged took place in 3rd in 1978 when it make up 60%.
After 20 years, while the proportion of juveniles gradually climbed up to 83%, achieving the first placs among all. While, the percentage of the middle aged remained stable, there was a fall to 70% of people who from 25 to 34 years old. Smilarly, the quantity of people more than 50 years old also stayed unchanged with 40%
In the last period, while the number of people in early adulthood reached plateau, there was a steadily drop to 80%. Although the proportion of people who more than 50 years old also ascended, the increase was significant enough, so it stood at last position. The data of people who fall between 35 to 49 years old clearly decreased to 50%, which was same as than the statistic of people more than 50 years old
- e money given to help poor countries does not solve the problem of poverty so rich countries should give other types of help instead To what extent do agree or disagree 56
- In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard on their studies What do you think are the causes of this What solutions can you suggest 73
- The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years 67
- The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country from 1978 to 2008 67
- young people who commit crimes should be treated in the same as adults who commit crimes To what extent do you agree or disagree 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: the
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
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Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
... aged took place in 3rd in 1978 when it make up 60%. After 20 years, while the prop...
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Message: You used an adverb ('steadily') instead an adjective, or a noun ('drop') instead of another adjective.
...ly adulthood reached plateau, there was a steadily drop to 80%. Although the proportion of peop...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 33.7804878049 145% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1194.0 965.302439024 124% => OK
No of words: 260.0 196.424390244 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59230769231 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48553210047 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 106.607317073 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488461538462 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 348.3 283.868780488 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.07073170732 467% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.4926829268 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 176.257464743 43.030603864 410% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 170.571428571 112.824112599 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.1428571429 22.9334400587 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.23603664747 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139882842367 0.215688989381 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720143533731 0.103423049105 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0872263908656 0.0843802449381 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110609232737 0.15604864568 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0777200192684 0.0819641961636 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.2329268293 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.3012195122 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 11.4329268293 490% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.9970731707 153% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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