The question as to whether extreme sports should be prohibited has been a topic of debate of late. While one school of thought claims that individuals should have the right to enjoy any kind of sports they want. Personally, I side with the latter and will discuss both sides in this essay.
There are two compelling justifications explaining why the authorities should ban dangerous activities. One of which is that participants who lack fundamental knowledge and competences can risk their life potentially; as a result, this can probably cause long-lasting injuries on them. Hence, it will make them hard to function well on the daily basis, it means that the quality of life will worsen in the long run. Second, in the worst-case scenario, professional dwellers taking up extreme sports hardly cope with the stakes of dying, let alone normal people. For example, innumerable athletes took part in climbing Himalaya's peak mountains and had to pass away because of harsh climate alongside snow-slide which were reported in a host of newspapers the world over. Briefly, the government should consider about banning this kind of sport.
Nevertheless, I strongly believe that players can be safeguarded by measures and take various beneficial from doing this. First, working citizens with hectic lifestyle can practice dangerous sports as their hobbies in order to have extra ordinary sensory experiences of the sort not usually available in everyday life in terms of a deeper relationship with the natural environment. In light of this, those residents may relieve strain effectively, in other words, they can improve the productivity and creativity in their workplaces. Furthermore, it seems to me that as for the dynamic development of sports, there are more and more up-to-date equipment or protective gears; additionally, in certain developed nations, they levy a strict regulation on youngsters who under 18. In short, this behavior should be free to play in some extent of ameliorating mental health and firm rules.
To sum up, in spite of fatalities in such sports, I harbor this notion that people should play all of the dangerous activities if they so wish, with the enhancement of safe procedures plus severe disciplines.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, well, while, as for, as to, for example, in short, kind of, as a result, in other words, in spite of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23955431755 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9084194935 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.654596100279 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.051789338 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.4 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9333333333 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1333333333 7.06120827912 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20664032614 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069364068561 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666828910264 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127889035732 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494361899451 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.