Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

In modern era, using the television and the online movie platform are expand. There are debates about effect of that on youth. Some people believe there is no concern about that but I strongly hold with that idea movies and television have negative influence on how they behave.
The first and foremost reason coming to my mind is that no one doubt about wasting time of the television shows and the movies. In other hands, they have attractive scenes which addict for the youth to watch constantly such as action, nude, excitement and romantic scenes that are their favorite According to their age. So, they encourage to spend more time for watching. I remember an example of myself when I was younger, between twenty and twenty-one years old, I addicted to watching tv series. That years were the expansion of release great series of cinema including game of thrones, breaking bad, big bang theory and others high quality series. Some days I, just, had two or three hours sleep and I did not go to my university’s class. I stayed at dormitory and watched my favorite series. That semester I failed three of seven courses that I suffered to passed in next semester. And this effect bad influence on my educational records.
The second worthy reason is that, directing younger people to harmful manner. Especially, when a person watching most of the time, he or she is sedentary that it cause gain overweigh, blood pressure, dry eyes and more disease relate to sedentary. Besides, movies and shows are contents that can be reasons of most misbehavior in teenagers. Some of that have pornography content, rough scene, and unreal view point about life. I point to research about effect of a movie with full nudity scenes on google search of this movie and its phrase getting used on this movie. After release American pie on January 2014 searching for man and women genital rose twenty-fold in USA at that time, and most of researcher were the teenagers between 14 to 23 year who watched this movie secretly despite this fact movie belonging just to over eighteen people. So, this moves younger people in changing their needs ad mis behavior in that age.
At conclusion, the movie and television have very negative effect on the younger person more than two reasons point in previous paragraph that were spending time more than regular time on this platform and misconduct of he or she. So, I think the governor should approve more regulation on watching tv and movie for the youth.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 340, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'spending'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: spending
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Line 4, column 40, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... At conclusion, the movie and television have very negative effect on the younger...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, second, so, i think, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2061.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82669789227 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43618935334 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555035128806 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5189331336 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1428571429 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.52380952381 5.45110844103 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195626901084 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582404812632 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563683672829 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149354709935 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065524460149 0.0645574589148 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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