Some people believe that the aging population is good for business the economy and society Others however disagree with this view Discuss both views and give your opinion
One of the most controversial today relates to whether the aging population could bring several benefits to enterprises, the economy, and society. This essay will discuss the question from both points of view and clarity why I agree with the latter group.
On the one side of the argument, there are several economic and societal benefits. Firstly, senior workers can contribute to some sectors, such as teachers, doctors, and scientific research thanks to their extensive experiences. One good illustration of this is the vast knowledge and hands-on experience of professional doctors that could help patients overcome serious surgeries. It is also possible to say that the aging population brings perks to society by grandparents can do babysitting, and mentally supporting.
On the other hand, It is argued that the economy will be affected in the future. The main reason for this issue is the fertility rate becoming less. This leads to many nations that will be short of workers who are the potential workforce in the future that makes material wealth in society. Secondly, the more older people would pose a burden on families since parents would have to take after senior family members, and no doubt aged citizens tend to be conservative and stubborn, which causes frequent conflicts.
In conclusion, both arguments have their benefits. It has an advantage for some certain fields because of the level of seniority of people. However, I believe that all aspects of society will be negatively affected in the future, especially the national economy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 306, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'older' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: older
...terial wealth in society. Secondly, the more older people would pose a burden on families ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1315.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2390438247 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75624659408 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.645418326693 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3424009353 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.153846154 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3076923077 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.69230769231 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215947584959 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625568706657 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443039412234 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116843168169 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370153646068 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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