Some believe children spending time on television and games is beneficial.others don't agree.discuss both views and give opinion.
Few of people convinced that youngster guzzling time on television and games will give positive impact. While others oppose this notion. I will examine both viewpoints and convey the opinion.
Every single person have different idea and several of them disregard and give permit to their youngster on television and games. In other words, they considering that the youngster need time to learn by television or online because in fundamentally many advantange can gathered such as know about development country, situation in outside, education from another countries, different culture among region and others. As illustration, my parents will let my brother to watching television at 8 P.M because on Trans7 stations with entitled "On the Spot", they shows several education about world such as phenomenon of the world and history of Indonesia. Thus, youngster not only receiving insight in school, but in home they can still study everyday.
On the other hand, many people said that television and games very harming to youngster brain. Moreover, the big impact from this condition made youngster became addicted and forget about another activities that more essential to improve their capability such as estabilish communication with people around them, ignore their study and lazy to made positive effect for life. The consequence is changing their mindset and only care about their world. For instance, my cousin everyday spare time to played mobile legend on his phone and ignored his parrents remark, because of this he became stunned and always contend what his parrents said. Thats why games ot television have a lot of negative effect even change attitude of someone.
To conclude, using television and games will bring varieties of impact wich is bad or good effects, it is depend how the youngster use it. In my opinion, something will be positive if the user understand and know to handle it, and vice versa.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...on and games will give positive impact. While others oppose this notion. I will exami...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 496, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: M
...y brother to watching television at 8 P.M because on Trans7 stations with entitle...
^
Line 2, column 569, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'show'
Suggestion: show
... entitled 'On the Spot', they shows several education about world such as p...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 575, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun education seems to be countable; consider using: 'several educations'.
Suggestion: several educations
...led 'On the Spot', they shows several education about world such as phenomenon of the w...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 750, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...chool, but in home they can still study everyday. On the other hand, many people said t...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 641, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
... always contend what his parrents said. Thats why games ot television have a lot of n...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 107, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...pact wich is bad or good effects, it is depend how the youngster use it. In my opinion...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, still, thus, while, for instance, such as, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24193548387 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62103275354 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606451612903 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.7112068363 49.4020404114 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.071428571 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1428571429 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144808631289 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597131196237 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500330287343 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106663215238 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062912621572 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 105, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...on and games will give positive impact. While others oppose this notion. I will exami...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 496, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: M
...y brother to watching television at 8 P.M because on Trans7 stations with entitle...
^
Line 2, column 569, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'show'
Suggestion: show
... entitled 'On the Spot', they shows several education about world such as p...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 575, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun education seems to be countable; consider using: 'several educations'.
Suggestion: several educations
...led 'On the Spot', they shows several education about world such as phenomenon of the w...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 750, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...chool, but in home they can still study everyday. On the other hand, many people said t...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 641, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
... always contend what his parrents said. Thats why games ot television have a lot of n...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 107, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...pact wich is bad or good effects, it is depend how the youngster use it. In my opinion...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, still, thus, while, for instance, such as, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24193548387 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62103275354 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606451612903 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.7112068363 49.4020404114 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.071428571 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1428571429 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.14285714286 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144808631289 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597131196237 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500330287343 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106663215238 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062912621572 0.056905535591 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.