The pie charts below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s (rewrite2)
Given are the pie chart and the table which illustrate the reasons of worldwide land destroyed and the percentages of land degraded by various reasons in three continents: North America, Europe and Oceania in the 1990s.
Overall, over-gazing by cattle was the major cause of land degradation in global. Comparing in three regions, the degradation rate of soil in European countries seems to have the worst than other regions.
Firstly, the major reason of less productivity of agricultural land in 1990s was over-gazing by animals, its took up to 35%, which was 5 times higher than the figure of miscellaneous factors. Moreover, the deforestation and the over-cultivation were also responsible for land degraded, as 30% was taken by the former reason and 28% was a proportion of over-cultivation.
Secondly, in three continents, Europe had the highest percentage of total land degradation with 23%, which was higher than the statistics in Oceania and North America by 10% and 18% respectively. In Europe, the deforestation accounted as the first rank from three reasons, while the over-cultivation was contributed the most in North America and the over-gazing was the major concern of destroying soil in Oceania, respectively.
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seems to have the worst than other regions.
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Sentence: Firstly, the major reason of less productivity of agricultural land in 1990s was over-gazing by animals, its took up to 35, which was 5 times higher than the figure of miscellaneous factors.
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while the over-cultivation was contributed the most
while the over-cultivation contributed the most
and the over-gazing was the major concern of destroying soil in Oceania, respectively.
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