Without any shadow of doubt, in today's world, because of the fact that both parents are working in most of the families, spending quality time with their children has become a big challenge for parents. Keeping this fact in mind, some people are of the opinion that it is better to spend the free time they have by playing games or sports with their children; however, some others believe spending time on their children's schoolwork can be more beneficial. Regarding this controversial issue, I am personally positive about the former group's idea. The reasons listed below will strengthen my viewpoint.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that playing games or sports can be good for both children and parent's health. These kinds of activities enhance both the physical and mental health. As an example, my uncle and his wife both are doctors and very busy people. They are just free in the weekend, and they have limited time to spend with their children. They do their best to spend this narrow time efficiently; hence, every weekend, they play tennis with their children. As a result, now they all are very fit and healthy, and my cousins have a very relaxed mind. As you can see, giving more credit to activities that influence health can be more beneficial for children.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that parents have the field to teach their children life skills, while playing sports or games with them. Children already learn lessons at school, but knowing how to do well at life is the thing which they can learn better in the context of the family. To illustrate, my cousins have a better understanding of competing; because they have learned that life is about winning and losing. They have learned this skill alongside their parents by playing tennis, and now they use this skill in society. Consequently, children who spend more time playing and having fun with their parents, are more probable to have better relationships in the future.
Taking all above-mentioned arguments into consideration, it can be concluded that it is more crucial for parents to allocate their free time to play and have fun with their children rather than focusing on their children's studies. Because, such activities not only boost family's mental and physical health, but also provide children with practical life lessons.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 47, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...t any shadow of doubt, in todays world, because of the fact that both parents are working in most of the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 536, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'groups'' or 'group's'?
Suggestion: groups'; group's
...am personally positive about the former groups idea. The reasons listed below will str...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed below will strengthen my viewpoint. The first exquisite point to be mentione...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h can be more beneficial for children. Another reason which deserves some words...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
... life is the thing which they can learn better in the context of the family. To illust...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve better relationships in the future. Taking all above-mentioned arguments int...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, regarding, so, then, well, while, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96192893401 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48747150618 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494923857868 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4576548804 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.611111111 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8888888889 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385426908818 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119477971948 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110274903115 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249106172592 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469309333033 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 47, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...t any shadow of doubt, in todays world, because of the fact that both parents are working in most of the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 536, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'groups'' or 'group's'?
Suggestion: groups'; group's
...am personally positive about the former groups idea. The reasons listed below will str...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed below will strengthen my viewpoint. The first exquisite point to be mentione...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...h can be more beneficial for children. Another reason which deserves some words...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 271, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
... life is the thing which they can learn better in the context of the family. To illust...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve better relationships in the future. Taking all above-mentioned arguments int...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, regarding, so, then, well, while, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96192893401 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48747150618 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494923857868 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4576548804 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.611111111 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8888888889 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385426908818 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119477971948 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110274903115 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249106172592 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0469309333033 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.