***2.It is important for people to take risks, in both their professional lives and personal lives.***
***Do the advantages of taking these risks outweigh the disadvantages?***
It is believed that embracing risks is paramount importance for individuals’ career path and their life. Although, there are some drawbacks, I firmly think that it is overshadowed by numerous benefits.
On the one hand, taking risks can pose a serious threat to one’s financial condition and professional. This happens when those venturing all their savings to the financial market without a proper evaluation and knowledge may run higher risks of being insolvent or going bankrupt. For instance, in Vietnam, a large number of people being inadequate for economics understanding invested all their budget in some real estate projects. As a result, they suffered from a dire consequence of this investment decision by not only losing all their money but also owing a massive debt. Therefore, it is necessary to take all life-changing decisions into consideration prior to taking risks.
On the other hand, risk taking plays a pivotal role in individuals’ career paths as well as their life. Since it allows people to get out of their comfort zone in order to reach their full potential. Taking Mark Zukerberg as an example, if he had not dropped out of Harvard University, he would not have founded Facebook, which is a giant global technology firms let alone becoming one of the wealthiest men in the world. Hence, so as to reach the pinnacles of success, human should be used to embracing risks.
To summarize, while risk taking is fairly adverse, I strongly concur that its positive impacts can outweigh those limitations.
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- 2 It is important for people to take risks in both their professional lives and personal lives Do the advantages of taking these risks outweigh the disadvantages 61
- 2 It is important for people to take risks in both their professional lives and personal lives Do the advantages of taking these risks outweigh the disadvantages 61
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...ls’ career paths as well as their life. Since it allows people to get out of their co...
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Suggestion:
...k Zukerberg as an example, if he had not dropped out of Harvard University, he wo...
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...the wealthiest men in the world. Hence, so as to reach the pinnacles of success, human s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for instance, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1283.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11155378486 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89116783442 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.657370517928 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 395.1 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4890857546 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.916666667 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9166666667 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.83333333333 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257789322462 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0904999238143 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616056503068 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151887674165 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0178227961184 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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