The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the above memo, the author argues that to curtail the number of on-the-job accidents Quiot Manufacturing should shorten each of their three work shift by one hour so that workers should get an adequate amount of sleep since sleep and fatigue is one of the salient factors behind the on-the-job accidents. The author bolsters his argument based on the premise that last year there have been fewer accidents at the nearby Panoply Industries plant where work shifts are one hour shorter than theirs, thus ostensively implementing the same strategy will reduce the number of accidents. However, before evaluating the author’s main conclusion, three unstated assumptions need to be answered.
Firstly, the author argues that by ostensively adopting the same strategy as the nearby panoply industrious plant, Quiont Manufacturing will be able to dwindle the number of accidents without any proper evidence about both of the industries. One may raise questions about the authenticity of the comparison. In other words, is the strategy of using circumstances from one thing to generalise and predict others legitimate? Perhaps, the two industries are not similar at all. Maybe these two industries produce completely separate goods and workers of Quiont Manufacturing deal with more risky works than Panoply. If the above scenario is true then the author's argument holds no water. The author has to provide more legitimate evidence regarding two industries regarding their functionality to rectify his claim.
Secondly, the author states that sleep and fatigue are one of the core factors behind accidents without any proper justification. One may wonder whether sleep and fatigue is the only reason behind the accidents. There is a feasibility that poor work environment is the sole cause of the accidents. Maybe poor maintenance and the dilapidated condition of the machines are causing the mishaps. The author does not provide any admissible evidence about sleep being the core factor of accidents. The author must provide more evidence perhaps in the form of a systematic research study regarding the effect of sleep on workers to bolster his claim otherwise, the author’s argument is seriously counterfeit.
In conclusion, the author’s argument stands now is seriously flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author can answer the three questions above and offers more evidence perhaps in the form of a systematic research study then it will be possible to evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation that reducing the working hour at each shift will be efficacy to lower the number of accidents.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 417 350
No. of Characters: 2189 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.519 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.249 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.759 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.607 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.352 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.512 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ated assumptions need to be answered. Firstly, the author argues that by osten...
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Line 3, column 614, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eal with more risky works than Panoply. If the above scenario is true then the aut...
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Line 3, column 653, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... If the above scenario is true then the authors argument holds no water. The author has...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ir functionality to rectify his claim. Secondly, the author states that sleep a...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r’s argument is seriously counterfeit. In conclusion, the author’s argument sta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, thus, as to, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2235.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 417.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35971223022 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85556838965 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482014388489 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.310105973 57.8364921388 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.166666667 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38888888889 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220608193789 0.218282227539 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623541887901 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730983617036 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141021128611 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100756847381 0.0628817314937 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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