The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Most people nowadays hold a similar view that the most important function of
music is that it helps people reduce stress. In my opinion, I partially agree with
this view because music has many other purposes and my reason will be
explained in the following paragraphs.
On the one hand, we couldn’t refuse some merits in listening to music is that music is considered an entertainment tool that can help us reduce stress level in the most effective way. After a tiring day of work or study, soothing music will help us relax, be happier, make us perceive a more peaceful life and even makes our mood more uplifting at work. It can be said that music is something that can maintain good emotions because it brings positive effects to
people’s lives. Moreover, music is like vivid sounds that remove all troubles in life,
without music this world would become faded and lifeless. Take myself as an example, no sooner had I listened to my favorite song than I temporarily forget all the pressures and worries from daily work and relax our mind

On the other hand, It is clear that the function of music is not only to entertain, but
also to express the deep emotions within the melodies themselves. The lyrics of a
piece of music will express the author’s own feelings or bring a good message to
everyone, to life. There are many different genres of music and each song will
express different meanings. For example, songs about the fatherland, about folk
songs have displayed about the culture imbued with the identity of the nation and
that is something that we are always proud of.
In conclusion, from my point of view not only does music not only help people reduce stress, but other functions also
bring many positive meanings to humans.

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Average: 7.3 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 12, column 30, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...essage to everyone, to life. There are many different genres of music and each song will exp...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8262295082 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4159196101 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55737704918 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.2171767558 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.818181818 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7272727273 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 16.0 4.38176352705 365% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269822585603 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112077431809 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111096477942 0.0667982634062 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.086629758692 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102776440161 0.056905535591 181% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 12, column 30, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...essage to everyone, to life. There are many different genres of music and each song will exp...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8262295082 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4159196101 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55737704918 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.2171767558 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.818181818 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7272727273 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 16.0 4.38176352705 365% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269822585603 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112077431809 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111096477942 0.0667982634062 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.086629758692 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102776440161 0.056905535591 181% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.