The following appeared in a memorandum written by the vice president of Health Naturally a small but expanding chain of stores selling health food and other health related products Our previous experience has been that our stores are most profitable in ar

The vice president, in this argument, concluded that they should build a new store at Plainsville, based on the evidences that Plainsville has residents who concerned with leading healthy lives and also with two more related evidence. However, before evaluate his conclusion we needtwo evidences to justify histwo unstated assumptions that he made in this argument.

First of all, the vice president made the assumption that the sales of some products in these city is high and it will also remain high for their products. However, more people buy these type of products doesn’t gurantee that they will buy their products also. It is possible that there is some high quality stores available in Plainsville and people who buy these products are their own customer. If this case happen, then the conclusion made in the argument will collapse.

Secondly, the local health club has more customer than before. The vice precident made an unjustified assumption here that the more customer in the local health club means that the people who exercise at Plainsville increased than before. But, perhaps, they increased their customer by advertising and there is no increase in total number of people who exercise. If this above example holds water then the conclusion formulated in the argument will crumble.

In summary, the current state of argument exhibits notable flaws attributed to its several unwarranted assumptions. If the vice president can come out with more proofs to make this assumptions justified, then we can evaluate the conclusion made by the vice president in the argument.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...antee that they will buy their products also. It is possible that there is some high...
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Line 5, column 364, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...in total number of people who exercise. If this above example holds water then the...
^^
Line 7, column 177, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...t can come out with more proofs to make this assumptions justified, then we can eval...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, in summary, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.6327345309 25% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1343.0 2260.96107784 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 256.0 441.139720559 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24609375 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67191783135 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 204.123752495 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51953125 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 705.55239521 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2243635174 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.916666667 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91666666667 5.70786347227 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101342918277 0.218282227539 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0394018459998 0.0743258471296 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354832335789 0.0701772020484 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0603273472436 0.128457276422 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00921662352589 0.0628817314937 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 257 350
No. of Characters: 1302 1500
No. of Different Words: 127 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.004 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.066 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.573 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 90 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.417 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.61 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.617 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.152 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5