It is true that people, in recent decades, have become increasingly reliant on technology for leisure activities. While this trend has both negative and positive aspects, I believe that the disadvantages will overshadow the advantages.
On the one hand, spending spare time using technological advances for entertainment will bring about several positive impacts. First, it can be an effective way for workers to maintain a work-life balance. For example, after a hard-working day, people have to do household chores or homework, thanks to the development of technology they can engage in recreational activities at home, such as watching films, which enables them to release stress significantly. Second, by taking advantage of technology for leisure activities, individuals can get a chance to expand their social circle. Some social media platforms like Facebook, in fact, allow users to not only stay in touch with their relationships but also connect with others across the world, which contributes to fostering globalization.
On the other hand, I would argue that the pitfalls of using the advances in technology are more significant than the benefits. In terms of physical problems, it is a primary culprit behind a sedentary lifestyle in society, especially among the younger generation. Students, nowadays, tend to devote almost their free time to taking screen-time activities, including playing video games, leading to a lack of physical exercise, contributing to an increase in the obesity rate. Furthermore, overusing technology can give rise to adverse effects on mental health. In other words, users are more likely to suffer mental issues, such as impaired vision or sleep disorder, due to excessive exposure to technology
In conclusion, I consider that reliance on technology to fill leisure time can help people in certain aspects, however, it causes substantially detrimental effects on not only physical problems but also mental ones.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in other words, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51827242525 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05281811742 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641196013289 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.9244980275 49.4020404114 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.416666667 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0833333333 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8333333333 7.06120827912 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249160533941 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811725758335 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614043492158 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148237548108 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738237241333 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.12 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in other words, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51827242525 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05281811742 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641196013289 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.9244980275 49.4020404114 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.416666667 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0833333333 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8333333333 7.06120827912 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249160533941 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811725758335 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614043492158 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148237548108 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738237241333 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.12 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.