it is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is undeniable that a healthy lifestyle has positive impacts on community health. However, I disagree with the viewpoint that public money should be spent more on projects of improving general health of community rather than on ill treatment.
Supporters may find that the adoption of healthy lifestyle benefits in many ways. First and foremost, it prevents illness by improving the environment quality. For instance, during the covid pandemic, those who usually do exercises and keep their house clean overcame that unexpected event more easily than those who did not. Another example is the case of Africa, where many died at young ages because of illness. In this country, people usually eat food by hand without washing it before, and the sanitary quality here is extremely bad. Therefore, if the awareness of health in community increased, it would be a great solution for a lower death rate.
On the other hand, treatment of people with illness is equally important. First, it helps improve competencies for health care workers. Obviously, new strains of viruses are ever-changing to resist to current medicines and treatment technology. Therefore, the delay of treatment can lead to more serious problems as community immunity cannot catch up with the speed of viral diseases spread. Additionally, it is a serious ethics problem if treatable illness do not receive medical care due to high expenses as government stops sponsor.
In conclusion, while promoting a healthy lifestyle is beneficial to health industry, I believe that investments in promoting a healthy lifestyle and in advanced technology or skill to heal illness should be balanced.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1395.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30418250951 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81979606308 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.634980988593 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7300496473 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6428571429 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7857142857 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64285714286 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264745059225 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788239625687 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666798645057 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161694900942 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369044623392 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.