The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Antisocial, by definition, is behaviors considered annoying and harmful to the society, and smoking is one of those. Recent years have witnessed heated debate over socially negative impact that mobile devices have in comparison to smoking. From my point of view, although there are several negative effects conducted by phone users, banning the utilization of mobile devices in recent days is not advisable.
On the one hand, part of the population regard mobile phones as antisocial as smoking for some justifications, chief of which is that both of them exert detrimental influences on the well-being of people around smokers and phone users. To begin with, taking cigarettes can be seriously harmful to the physical health. In fact, the smoke from cigarettes might not only increase the risk of respiratory diseases for those who are smoking but also health deterioration for passive smokers, who have not lit a cigarette in their whole life. Meanwhile, though texting or phoning do not harm users’ physical health, this means of telecommunication may cause discomfort and unpleasantness for public members. To exemplify, if a person takes a phone call in the middle of a movie in the cinema, he can unpleasantly distract others watching films at that time. Therefore, this disruption and impoliteness goes against the social codes of conduct and unreasonably ruin the enjoyment of viewers at the movie theater. As a result, the indiscriminate use of mobile devices is categorized as antisocial.
On the other hand, despite the fact that using mobile phones is regarded socially disrupted to some extent, I firmly believe that it is absurd to prohibit people accessing to their mobile devices the same way as we have done to cigarette smokers. As a matter of fact, smokers have no valid excuse for smoking in public places and put others’ health in danger, yet phones are the irreplaceable items in modern world and the policy-makers cannot outlaw unless someone use them in a socially unacceptable manner. By way of illustration, if there were a prohibition of mobile phones in movie theater, cinema goers would leave their devices at home. In case his son tried to call him for medical emergency, he could not receive the call, and the life of his son might be at risk. Consequently, a blanket ban on the use of mobile devices may be attributable to regrettable situations.
To sum up, in spite of the fact that using mobile phones is supposed antisocial in certain circumstances, I lean toward the view that as mobile phones are originally made for communicating information and bridging people gap, it would be unreasonable to treat using this mean of communication the same way as smoking.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 466, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
...icy-makers cannot outlaw unless someone use them in a socially unacceptable manner....
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, in fact, as a matter of fact, as a result, in spite of, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2262.0 1615.20841683 140% => OK
No of words: 445.0 315.596192385 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08314606742 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9872801926 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539325842697 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 738.0 506.74238477 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.8933094095 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.375 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8125 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0625 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318333815137 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100000885347 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649762522802 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200077334954 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0259930130529 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 466, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
...icy-makers cannot outlaw unless someone use them in a socially unacceptable manner....
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, in fact, as a matter of fact, as a result, in spite of, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2262.0 1615.20841683 140% => OK
No of words: 445.0 315.596192385 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08314606742 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9872801926 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539325842697 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 738.0 506.74238477 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.8933094095 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.375 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8125 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0625 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318333815137 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100000885347 0.084324248473 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0649762522802 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200077334954 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0259930130529 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.