In some families around the world, parents often encourage their children to take efforts so that they can reach their desired goal. Some children are often inspired by this message while others follow an unacceptable path to achieve their dreams.
While motivating their children to take efforts, parents or elders of the family often tend to pressurize them. This can persuade a child to practice an immoral act which will help him achieve his dream. For example, if a student is forced to get good marks in his exam, it is a high possibility that he may follow any unfair means to get marks. Instead, the student should be encouraged to study and have a precise knowledge of each and every concept relating to a particular subject. Also, parents should let him try as per his willingness.
However, some children are able to achieve anything they want when they try hard enough. An important factor that contributes to their success is the support from elders in the surroundings. Once, the legendary cricketer Sachin Tendulkar was not able to even hold a bat when he was young. However, his elder brother and father encouraged him so much that he has now created many records which seem impossible to break even for today's players.
In conclusion, the impact of children being told to take enough efforts mainly depends on the environment around them. If they are encouraged in a positive manner, there is a greater chance that children will succeed in their lives. On the other hand, if they are forced to take efforts irrespective of their willingness, it can have a negative impact as well.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 192, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...upport from elders in the surroundings. Once, the legendary cricketer Sachin Tendulk...
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Line 7, column 91, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding environment'?
Suggestion: the surrounding environment
...o take enough efforts mainly depends on the environment around them. If they are encouraged in a positive m...
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Line 7, column 143, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a positive manner" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ent around them. If they are encouraged in a positive manner, there is a greater chance that childre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1333.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86496350365 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55611277229 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569343065693 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.5020823771 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.2142857143 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5714285714 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285126302572 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103153126608 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124038478075 0.0667982634062 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178717727725 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060826984189 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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