Nowadays many young people are drawn towards dangerous sports. What makes them so attractive? What measures should be taken to regulate such sports and minimise the risks?
From the last few decades, extreme sports have been gaining popularity among youngsters. There could be a variety of reasons for showing such affinity towards danger game. However, a slew of solution's approach could be taken to tackle this problem and bringing down its high risk rate.
To start with, fascination is the first and foremost cause of adolescents onto tricky sports. They love to take part in adventures activities by nature. This is why then engage themselves in activities like hiking, bunji jumping, skiing, skating, snow boarding and so on. These seems appealing to them, and they try to get an Adrenalin rush from them. This kind of actions can become so vulnerable that they could generate long term health hazards in human body such as high blood pressure, stress, tension, breathing problem and so on.
Nevertheless, a range of measures can be taken to reduce the health risk to some extent. Firstly, Government could arrange campaign, seminars which would explain health issue and risk factors of extreme games. Electronic media can play a role by organising television programs hosted by celebrities and superstars who have a great influence among adolescents. By way of illustration, if Sakib al Hassan, the number one all rounder in cricket, anchored a health programme and discussed the negative consequences of ticklish games then it will be easily accepted by juveniles.
To conclude, it can be said that danger games have no health benefits, rather it creates lusting health problems which could be life threatening too. Some positive motivational actions and awareness programs might solve these problems partially or fully.
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'then', 'kind of', 'such as', 'to start with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.28762541806 0.247107548796 116% => OK
Verbs: 0.153846153846 0.15552993741 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0735785953177 0.0946569551029 78% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0401337792642 0.0501201869031 80% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0334448160535 0.0437536398559 76% => OK
Prepositions: 0.103678929766 0.122223957237 85% => OK
Participles: 0.0468227424749 0.0403219363162 116% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.71542058628 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0267558528428 0.0326786765898 82% => OK
Particles: 0.00334448160535 0.00163938923432 204% => Too many particles.
Determiners: 0.0702341137124 0.0861751148067 82% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0401337792642 0.0214082191602 187% => Try to use less modal verbs (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0133779264214 0.0119246538136 112% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1670.0 1933.38276553 86% => OK
No of words: 266.0 316.052104208 84% => OK
Chars per words: 6.25468164794 6.10592293882 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20519365927 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.390977443609 0.37474360046 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.315789473684 0.284197041944 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.221804511278 0.203843217982 109% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.131578947368 0.137313986986 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71542058628 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.672932330827 0.560935902166 120% => OK
Word variations: 81.4637335307 60.7401812628 134% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0911823647 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.7725350517 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9990281715 49.5273876611 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5 93.4120437189 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3 15.2821509519 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.594174754866 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.39078156313 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01102204409 120% => OK
Readability: 50.5789473684 49.1922392462 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.92647058824 1.69127372897 114% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Topic essay coherence: 0.187605192106 0.332604825255 56% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0660059508318 0.102734651613 64% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0434160110943 0.0668474354756 65% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.484614604221 0.534917948617 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.106787335374 0.148666948902 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707388209953 0.13441755203 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419832818124 0.0742828286743 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.1887455451 0.324241079732 58% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0241093301192 0.0640056729886 38% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115282491036 0.22793763319 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394129554407 0.0582452615562 68% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.68436873747 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41883767535 29% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 5.88977955912 102% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.60220440882 231% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.00200400802 50% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 10.493987976 124% => OK
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 7.0 Out of 9