Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
It goes without saying that our families play an important role in our lives so many young adults would rather live with their family for a longer time. However, others people think that it would be a better idea for children to be independent of their parents as soon as they can. I am of the latter opinion. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, by becoming independent, children would learn and prepare better to live alone in the future. No matter how old we are, we all have to move out of our parents’ house sooner or later to start to own families. Consequently, we must acquire all the skills needed to live on our own. There is no better way to do that than to be independent since we were young. My own experience is a good example to illustrate this. Ever since I was a kid, I had the dream of studying abroad and I remember being told that it wasn’t easy to get used to living alone in the university’s campus. As the result, when I was ten years old, I started to learn to become more self-reliant. I was taught the fundamental skills such as cooking meals or doing the laundry. Because of that, I didn’t have a hard time familiarizing myself with the life in university which many of my friends had.
Furthermore, if we really love our parents, we ought not to always bother them and not to rely on them too much. Unfortunately, parents are getting older day by day. Their aging results in continual tiredness and occasional sickness. Therefore, we should let them have time to relax and enjoy their lives by being independent of them. For example, my parents, who are aging, tend to be tired now and then so I don’t want them to worry about me too much. Since I went studying abroad and lead an independent life of my parents, they have had more time together and for relaxation because my dad doesn’t have to take me to school every day do and my mom doesn’t need to tidy my room every morning like they used to do. Without me at home, they are able to go on vacations more often and they won’t ever be stressed out because of worrying about me since they know that I can live on my own.
In conclusion, I truly believe that a young adult should live independently of their parents. This is because independence would teach children to well-prepare to live alone and children shouldn’t bother parents so that they can enjoy their lives. Moreover, knowing that their child is independent, parents don’t have to worry about their child too much.
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'i feel', 'in conclusion', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.153543307087 0.229887763892 67% => OK
Verbs: 0.194881889764 0.158761421928 123% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0767716535433 0.0866891130778 89% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0728346456693 0.046263068375 157% => OK
Pronouns: 0.122047244094 0.0685040099705 178% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.116141732283 0.118717715034 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0393700787402 0.0351676179071 112% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.57651544975 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0511811023622 0.0309702414327 165% => OK
Particles: 0.00196850393701 0.00188951952338 104% => OK
Determiners: 0.0551181102362 0.0887237588012 62% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0236220472441 0.0209618222197 113% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00984251968504 0.0139019557991 71% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2580.0 2387.08602151 108% => OK
No of words: 463.0 408.028673835 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57235421166 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.259179265659 0.338922669872 76% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.187904967603 0.251872472559 75% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.127429805616 0.174417080927 73% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0777537796976 0.112833075102 69% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57651544975 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505399568035 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 58.2191798147 59.2087087015 98% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.1304347826 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6364476732 48.84282405 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.173913043 120.699889404 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1304347826 20.5533526081 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.652173913043 0.644075263715 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 38.9209315429 45.7405998639 85% => OK
Elegance: 0.792929292929 1.45489161554 55% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327928854438 0.300154397459 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0976015221548 0.103427244359 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0731068285015 0.0752933317313 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.452992503165 0.497263757937 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.140718266785 0.151897553556 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108022665713 0.114077575197 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534419322917 0.0781384742642 68% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.32701719006 0.336927656856 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0446052599847 0.067059652881 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231452159495 0.210909579961 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388339996693 0.0618886996521 63% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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