"Because of its spectacular natural beauty and consistent climate, Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. As a bonus, housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and real estate taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Nevertheless, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. Retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
The author of this argument makes a recommendation of Clearview, a place which he thinks is an ideal choice for retiring given its spectacular natural glory and consistently favorable climate. He has claimed that house prices in Clearview have plummeted in past one year and also the taxes are lower compared to neighboring towns. The author informs the reader that the mayor of Clearview promises to improve schooling and infrastructure facilities in the area and also would work for enhancing public services. In addition to these appealing statements, the author claims a great number of physicians to be in Clearview, who can ensure better health services. Although the author's claim initially seems enticing, a deeper thinking elucidates it as baseless and ambiguous. The author's recommendation is based on promises and not on real figures and evidence.
Firstly, the author claim that Clearview would be the best place to retire for any individual due to its natural beauty is preposterous. The beauty of a place is not the primary criteria for choosing it as a retirement place. Other major criterias like proximity for health services and family, budget for buying house etc take preponderance over the natural beauty of a place while selection of retirement place. Thus the author lacks in presenting a convincing case.
Furthermore, the author states housing cost and taxes to be low in Clearview compared to other towns. However the author does not present a single evidence to support this claim. For example, if the housing cost in neighboring towns is high merely by few dollars, then the buyers would be unaffected by this. Also it may happen that the facilities provided in neighboring towns are better and hence the tax rates are high. In that case, the author's recommendation loses hold over majority of the readers.
Moreover, as per author the mayor of Clearview has "promised" to improve schools, street and public services. Two points can be noted from this statement. Firstly, this statement serves as evidence that the schools, streets and public services in Clearview are not top quality and they need improvement. Secondly, the sincerity of the mayor in fulfilling his promise is dubious. For example, what if the mayor is a highly corrupt person, who has little intention to enhance Clearview? In such a scenario, Clearview would be the worst place to be for any retiree who wishes to reside peacefully and happily after retirement.
The author later claims that the number of physicians in Clearview is far greater than the national average. The author again fails to show any significant data to support this claim. It may occur that the number of physicians is high just by a petty value. Also, even if the physicians in Clearview are more, it does not guarantee a better health to all its residents. It may happen that the physicians merely reside in Clearview and have their clinics and hospitals in neighboring towns.
Thus the author’s suggestion for selecting Clearview as retirement place is unacceptable and lacks substantial evidence. It fails to persuade the readers of this article in approving Clearview as ideal place to reside after retirement. The author should have presented relevant figures and data to support his stand.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'while', 'for example', 'in addition']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.264119601329 0.25644967241 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.152823920266 0.15541462614 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0813953488372 0.0836205057962 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0514950166113 0.0520304965353 99% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0265780730897 0.0272364105082 98% => OK
Prepositions: 0.121262458472 0.125424944231 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0398671096346 0.0416121511921 96% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.93951843438 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.031561461794 0.026700313972 118% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.109634551495 0.113004496875 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0166112956811 0.0255425247493 65% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00830564784053 0.0127820249294 65% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3301.0 2731.13054187 121% => OK
No of words: 535.0 446.07635468 120% => OK
Chars per words: 6.17009345794 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.57801047555 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.396261682243 0.378187486979 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.278504672897 0.287650121315 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.222429906542 0.208842608468 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.16261682243 0.135150697306 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93951843438 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 207.018472906 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454205607477 0.469332199767 97% => OK
Word variations: 53.0875712516 52.1807786196 102% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.039408867 145% => OK
Sentence length: 18.4482758621 23.2022227129 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2198991431 57.7814097925 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.827586207 141.986410481 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4482758621 23.2022227129 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.586206896552 0.724660767414 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 46.2987431518 51.9672348444 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.84172661871 1.8405768891 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392584262669 0.441005458295 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.098572428017 0.135418324435 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0689635807483 0.0829849096947 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.518538065583 0.58762219726 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.112696296288 0.147661913831 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145385470078 0.193483328276 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670156399653 0.0970749176394 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.396875990991 0.42659136922 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0343496435474 0.0774707102158 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27098599545 0.312017818177 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546319768636 0.0698173142475 78% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.33743842365 216% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 6.46551724138 217% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 14.657635468 130% => OK
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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