The Mozart school of music should obviously be the first choice of any music student ,aware of its reputation. First of all,
the Mozart age. second, the school has ample facilities and up-to-date professional equipment, and its faculty includes the best some of the most distinguished music teachers in the world. Finally,many Mozart graduates have gone on to be the best known and highly paid musicians in the nation.
The argument concluded the Mozart school of music is first choice of any music student ,Many Mozart graduated students are best known and most highly paid musicians in the nation. The argument is full of gaps and loop holes since it presents fragmentary evidence. Neither is the premises convincing nor is the conclusion compelling the argument is very evidently the result of a hasty generalization.
First of all, writer give lake of information about student age to training there it’s not mention and facility and up-to-date professional equipment, and which kind of faculty are there it’s not mention. Although not mention the skill of any student of who are be the great musician.
Secondly, What about fees of this school it’s not compared other school. Thus there mention many student who are graduated are most highly paid musicians in a nation that not in the sense all student who graduated from Mozart all are will be got big amount and not all adulate popular. And there training is stresses intensive practice It’s music school not military school.
Finely, although the fact that many famous musicians form the Mozart school and highly –paid performers might be student required natural tendency and motivated to attend achieved the lofty goals. For example some of the very young age not understand what they want to do in life.
In conclusion, the argument is result of a huge speculation in which the author has comfortably assumed a considerable amount of data had the author taken the above discussed factor into view , it would have rendered the argument irrefutable . But whatever is presented fails to provide a holistic picture to the superfluous claims being made.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'kind of', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.254777070064 0.25644967241 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.165605095541 0.15541462614 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0891719745223 0.0836205057962 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0700636942675 0.0520304965353 135% => OK
Pronouns: 0.031847133758 0.0272364105082 117% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0923566878981 0.125424944231 74% => OK
Participles: 0.0477707006369 0.0416121511921 115% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.66670360448 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.015923566879 0.026700313972 60% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.108280254777 0.113004496875 96% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00955414012739 0.0255425247493 37% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0254777070064 0.0127820249294 199% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1730.0 2731.13054187 63% => OK
No of words: 281.0 446.07635468 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.15658362989 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.57801047555 89% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.384341637011 0.378187486979 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.29537366548 0.287650121315 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.217081850534 0.208842608468 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.128113879004 0.135150697306 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66670360448 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 207.018472906 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548042704626 0.469332199767 117% => OK
Word variations: 55.6331119839 52.1807786196 107% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 20.039408867 60% => OK
Sentence length: 23.4166666667 23.2022227129 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.0902679101 57.7814097925 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.166666667 141.986410481 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4166666667 23.2022227129 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.916666666667 0.724660767414 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 3.58251231527 447% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 52.9540332147 51.9672348444 102% => OK
Elegance: 1.47619047619 1.8405768891 80% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.542685775658 0.441005458295 123% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.101711463028 0.135418324435 75% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0604094296823 0.0829849096947 73% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.654376239184 0.58762219726 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.139457713984 0.147661913831 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.238509205686 0.193483328276 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116744775947 0.0970749176394 120% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.287943445447 0.42659136922 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0649985362494 0.0774707102158 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.344225911183 0.312017818177 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090125783775 0.0698173142475 129% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 14.657635468 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More content wanted. For issue essays, around 450 words, for argument essays, around 400 words.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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