Both the reading and the lecture discuss the merits and demerits of using fuel-cell engine instead of internal- combustion engine. The reading focuses on the advantages of using the fuel- cell engine and it provides three points of support.However, the professor disproves these advantages and refutes each of the author's reasons.
First of all, the reading states that internal- combustion engine rely on petroleum in form of gasoline or disel , which are finite resources.While, hydrogen-fuel cell engine will not depleted. On the other hand, the orator stated that hydrogen-fuel cell engine is not the solution since hydrogen is not available and it must be pure .Hydrogen in pure form is artificial which is very difficult to produce.As a result, using hydrogen- fuel cell engine is not practical.
Furthermore,hydrogen- fuel cell engine will solve the pollutin problem.However, the professor oppose this idea by explainig that pure hydrogen is a significant source of pollution .Since the pure hydrogen result from the chemical process in which the using of hydrogen and gas create burning coal and oil that pollute the environment.
Finally, the passage asserts that fuel- cell engine is more economic than internal combusation engine. Conversely,the professor refute this point by stating that the manufacture of hydrogen is very expensive as it is made of platinium which is highly costing and no other material can replace the using of platinum to save money on the cost of producing hydrogen from platinum.
As shown the lecture refutes each point in the passage.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Furthermore,hydrogen- fuel cell engine will solve the pollutin problem.However, the professor oppose this idea by explainig that pure hydrogen is a significant source of pollution .Since the pure hydrogen result from the chemical process in which the using of hydrogen and gas create burning coal and oil that pollute the environment.
Description: The fragment professor oppose this is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace oppose with verb, past tense
Sentence: Conversely,the professor refute this point by stating that the manufacture of hydrogen is very expensive as it is made of platinium which is highly costing and no other material can replace the using of platinum to save money on the cost of producing hydrogen from platinum.
Description: The fragment professor refute this is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace refute with verb, past tense
Sentence: Furthermore,hydrogen- fuel cell engine will solve the pollutin problem.However, the professor oppose this idea by explainig that pure hydrogen is a significant source of pollution .Since the pure hydrogen result from the chemical process in which the using of hydrogen and gas create burning coal and oil that pollute the environment.
Error: pollutin Suggestion: pollution
Error: explainig Suggestion: explaining
Sentence: Finally, the passage asserts that fuel- cell engine is more economic than internal combusation engine.
Error: combusation Suggestion: combustion
Sentence: Conversely,the professor refute this point by stating that the manufacture of hydrogen is very expensive as it is made of platinium which is highly costing and no other material can replace the using of platinum to save money on the cost of producing hydrogen from platinum.
Error: platinium Suggestion: platinum
flaws:
Don't put a space before punctuation marks. Always put a space after punctuation marks. Essay e-grader is sensitive.
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better to have 4 paragraphs:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 8 12
No. of Words: 255 250
No. of Characters: 1291 1200
No. of Different Words: 128 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.996 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.063 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.566 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 52 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.178 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.484 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.808 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.158 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 111, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ing fuel cell engine instead of internal combustion engine. The reading focuses o...
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Line 1, column 187, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...uses on the advantages of using the fuel cell engine and it provides three poin...
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Line 1, column 200, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...dvantages of using the fuel cell engine and it provides three points of support...
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...ages of using the fuel cell engine and it provides three points of support.Howe...
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Line 1, column 243, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: However
...nd it provides three points of support.However, the professor disproves these advantag...
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Line 3, column 47, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...of all, the reading states that internal combustion engine rely on petroleum in f...
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Line 3, column 113, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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...n petroleum in form of gasoline or disel , which are finite resources.While, hydro...
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Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: While
...e or disel , which are finite resources.While, hydrogen fuel cell engine will not dep...
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Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e or disel , which are finite resources.While, hydrogen fuel cell engine will not dep...
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Line 3, column 185, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'deplete'
Suggestion: deplete
...ile, hydrogen fuel cell engine will not depleted. On the other hand, the orator stated t...
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Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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...gen is not available and it must be pure .Hydrogen in pure form is artificial whic...
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...n is not available and it must be pure .Hydrogen in pure form is artificial which is ver...
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...cial which is very difficult to produce.As a result, using hydrogen fuel cell eng...
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Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...t to produce.As a result, using hydrogen fuel cell engine is not practical. Fu...
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Line 5, column 12, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: , hydrogen
... engine is not practical. Furthermore,hydrogen fuel cell engine will solve the pollut...
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Line 5, column 21, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...s not practical. Furthermore,hydrogen fuel cell engine will solve the pollutin...
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Suggestion: However
... engine will solve the pollutin problem.However, the professor oppose this idea by exp...
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Line 5, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... pollutin problem.However, the professor oppose this idea by explainig that pure ...
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Line 5, column 144, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...his idea by explainig that pure hydrogen is a significant source of pollution .Si...
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Line 5, column 182, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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...en is a significant source of pollution .Since the pure hydrogen result from the ...
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Line 5, column 184, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Since
... is a significant source of pollution .Since the pure hydrogen result from the chemi...
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... Finally, the passage asserts that fuel cell engine is more economic than intern...
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... internal combusation engine. Conversely,the professor refute this point by stating ...
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Line 7, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ture of hydrogen is very expensive as it is made of platinium which is highly cos...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
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...of producing hydrogen from platinum. As shown the lecture refutes each point in...
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Discourse Markers used:
['conversely', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'while', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.351449275362 0.261695866417 134% => OK
Verbs: 0.134057971014 0.158904122519 84% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0579710144928 0.0723426182421 80% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0507246376812 0.0435111971325 117% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0108695652174 0.0277247811725 39% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123188405797 0.128828473217 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0398550724638 0.0370669169778 108% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.98700231303 2.5805825403 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00724637681159 0.0208969081088 35% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.123188405797 0.128158765124 96% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0144927536232 0.0158828679856 91% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.018115942029 0.0114777025283 158% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1594.0 1645.83664459 97% => OK
No of words: 253.0 271.125827815 93% => OK
Chars per words: 6.30039525692 6.08160592843 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.04852973271 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.387351778656 0.374372842146 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.304347826087 0.287516216867 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.221343873518 0.187439937562 118% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.126482213439 0.113142543107 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98700231303 2.5805825403 116% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498023715415 0.539623497131 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.6340510449 53.8517498576 87% => OK
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0529801325 61% => OK
Sentence length: 31.625 21.7502111507 145% => OK
Sentence length SD: 89.943645551 49.3711431718 182% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 199.25 132.220823453 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.625 21.7502111507 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.375 0.878197800319 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 3.39072847682 737% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 62.0597826087 50.5018328374 123% => OK
Elegance: 2.62962962963 1.90840788429 138% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.671104807888 0.549887131256 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.236939571931 0.142949733639 166% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.112790303917 0.0787303798458 143% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.826771368644 0.631733273073 131% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.17069252064 0.139662658121 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.397429074039 0.266732575781 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845087332466 0.103435571967 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.378227107967 0.414875509568 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.103580992049 0.0530846634433 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.448922029303 0.40443939384 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122064936872 0.0528353158467 231% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.26048565121 70% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.49668874172 114% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.62251655629 28% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 3.1766004415 94% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 10.2958057395 78% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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