Do you agree or disagree? Competitions between friends always has a negative effect on their friends?

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Do you agree or disagree? Competitions between friends always has a negative effect on their friends?

In this progressive world, where all the technologies are growing dramatically, have you ever taken into consideration how the way can individuals can approach remarkable triumph? There are numerous elements that influence succeeding in each major. One of the most significant factors is motivation. Some people are inclined to the opinion that competition has played a the prominent role of a significant motivator in this sophisticated world as a significant motivator, while others take the opposite perspective that it causes more stress for youth. There is one One remarkable question remains remaining unanswered is that whether this competition between friends are is helpful or not? . As far as I am concerned, I adhere to the opinion that an appropriate competition in recent new friendships is greatly beneficial. The following paragraphs will briefly elaborate my viewpoint.
First and foremost, regarding to educational aspect, competition between classmates bring out about more motivation for students. As observation Observation of the progress and hardworking perseverance of some students at school or university, encourages others to study more and pushes aims them toward being more purposeful. When they see others’ great and considerable improvements in grades and researches, other classmates would become more motivated for trying hard on in their studyingstudies. The best example that fits this point is my personal experience as an undergraduate student. It is worth mentioning that my own influential motivation to study hard for passing troublesome dental school entrance exam for dental school was the result admission of my close friend’s admission at to the same field of as mine studying in the previous semester, therefore I tried hard days and nights for to be admitted accepting at to that major. Thus, it goes without saying that these kind of competitions at schools can playshave a remarkable impact on students’ hardworking perseverance and success.
Aside from educational impacts, paramount importance of contest in the world of business and economic world is definitely clear to everyone. As an example, when a graduate student observes that his or her close friend is establishing his their own private business independently , is hiring several clerk staffs for his their newly-established company, and his rapid improvements in his their career very soon as well as earning considerable amount of money, he or she would obviously be encouraged to follow him the same way and do the same in his or her career life very soon , because he they would tell to himselfthemselves, that if my close friend with the same university degree as mine and the same professional experience is able to become successful , I would definitely do be able to do the same .therefore Therefore, he or she would accept its the risks during their life for more improvement . howeverHowever, without such kind of motivation, he or she might hesitate for this choice. Consequently, this economic and business activities would be both advantageous for the society due to hiring job opportunities they bring aboutsome people, and its the financial benefits for the country as well as for the mentioned youth monitory independency and enhancing the quality of his personal life. Hence, it is well proven that, watching our friend’s progress would stimulus stimulate us one to set up our his or her personal career.
In summary, having considered considering all of the aforementioned reasons leads to the conclusion that a sense of competition between close friends both adults and students has great impacts in on all aspects of their life . it It would contributes to more achievements in enhancing their knowledge and improving in their scientific field of studying alongside more business successfulness.

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Discourse Markers used:
['briefly', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'regarding', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'as for', 'in summary', 'kind of', 'as well as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.221212121212 0.229887763892 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.136363636364 0.158761421928 86% => OK
Adjectives: 0.128787878788 0.0866891130778 149% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0439393939394 0.046263068375 95% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0787878787879 0.0685040099705 115% => OK
Prepositions: 0.127272727273 0.118717715034 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0484848484848 0.0351676179071 138% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.29028431957 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0257575757576 0.0309702414327 83% => OK
Particles: 0.0030303030303 0.00188951952338 160% => OK
Determiners: 0.0772727272727 0.0887237588012 87% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.019696969697 0.0209618222197 94% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00757575757576 0.0139019557991 54% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3862.0 2387.08602151 162% => OK
No of words: 605.0 408.028673835 148% => OK
Chars per words: 6.38347107438 5.86048508987 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95951083803 4.48200974243 111% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.386776859504 0.338922669872 114% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.314049586777 0.251872472559 125% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.256198347107 0.174417080927 147% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.193388429752 0.112833075102 171% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29028431957 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Unique words: 306.0 212.727598566 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505785123967 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 63.336938962 59.2087087015 107% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 28.8095238095 20.5533526081 140% => OK
Sentence length SD: 155.373867007 48.84282405 318% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 183.904761905 120.699889404 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8095238095 20.5533526081 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.809523809524 0.644075263715 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 33.0 5.54480286738 595% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 60.2144824872 45.7405998639 132% => OK
Elegance: 1.53216374269 1.45489161554 105% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0852620670033 0.300154397459 28% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0747986959064 0.103427244359 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0602834126051 0.0752933317313 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.44762860131 0.497263757937 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.200878045943 0.151897553556 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0289492705888 0.114077575197 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356828088707 0.0781384742642 46% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.340447251452 0.336927656856 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0620869834372 0.067059652881 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0661957664445 0.210909579961 31% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295638795625 0.0618886996521 48% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8870967742 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 8.42114695341 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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