In this modern technology world everyone of us including from kids to older people, we are all addicted to the easiest life style which not good for the healthy way of doing things. I strongly, agree the point which says that children are not allow to play the computer video games for the following few reasons why I am supporting that statement.
First of all, most of the kids are nowadays wearing eye glasses at very small ages. One research article states that the reason for this problem is kids are playing video games more than six hour per day which causes more strain to the eyes and leads headache. Parents supposed to exercise restriction on hour of playing these games so that we avoid health disorders. Further, they are very inactive during the class hour, if, we are parents encourage the children in the real life games like running, soccer, cricket and basket ball that will helps in improving their health status.
Secondly, some the online video games using violent and vulgar text in message part which makes kids in going wrong path. Even though, there restriction in access these web sites still, it is not that practically implemented in the real world situation. For example, star war online video games which gives lots of sexual text that may corrupt our children in future. Some video game like word power games really helps the children to learn lots of things from internet games but they are fewer currently, If, these kinds of video games we can encourages the kids to play it.
Thirdly, over all school performs of children are reduced much since last thirty years because of kids more time encourages themselves in playing video games and not doing school home work. As a result more kids are getting only grade C and very few student getting grade A. This situations must be changed in order to make our children more productive for the nation. Above mentioned statements I got from CNN news channel interview.
Finally, because they spend more time in playing video games they are not having any kind social interaction even within family, for example one of friends son he very much interested in video games when relative comes house during that also they are not welcoming them, not even saying hi to neighbourhoods. Further, kids become more admen even they refuse to eat because they are very involved in the video games.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'third', 'thirdly', 'for example', 'as a result', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.295711060948 0.229887763892 129% => OK
Verbs: 0.155756207675 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0744920993228 0.0866891130778 86% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0699774266366 0.046263068375 151% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0519187358916 0.0685040099705 76% => OK
Prepositions: 0.124153498871 0.118717715034 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0519187358916 0.0351676179071 148% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.250046723 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0225733634312 0.0309702414327 73% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0744920993228 0.0887237588012 84% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00902934537246 0.0209618222197 43% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.020316027088 0.0139019557991 146% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2384.0 2387.08602151 100% => OK
No of words: 408.0 408.028673835 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.8431372549 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.289215686275 0.338922669872 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.218137254902 0.251872472559 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.129901960784 0.174417080927 74% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0710784313725 0.112833075102 63% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.250046723 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558823529412 0.524397521467 107% => OK
Word variations: 65.0559244697 59.2087087015 110% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 25.5 20.5533526081 124% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1200639387 48.84282405 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.0 120.699889404 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.5533526081 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.54480286738 216% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 47.3137254902 45.7405998639 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.69918699187 1.45489161554 117% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231204932553 0.300154397459 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.103700157178 0.103427244359 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0848849723928 0.0752933317313 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.559509267958 0.497263757937 113% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.164836869133 0.151897553556 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952818441042 0.114077575197 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577775274148 0.0781384742642 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.311837772463 0.336927656856 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0736523792384 0.067059652881 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158271565544 0.210909579961 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419963957658 0.0618886996521 68% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8870967742 50% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.6433691756 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.