Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should only play sports for fun, not in competitions or contests.
Throughout history, human beings have perpetually been concerned about how to bear children. Such a constant effort has become even more noticeable in the modern era where different factors such as social communications, schools and children`s friends have an undeniable impact on every young children`s behavior. In this regard, there has been a longstanding controversy among academicians as to whether children should only play sports for fun, not in competitions. I personally this agree with the above mentioned statement and believe that competitions play an inevitable parts in children`s success. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
The most prominent reason to be mentioned here is that competition assists children to acquire some important skills. A prime example of such a practical advantages is learning how to control their fear and utilizing it for prosper fast. Undoubtedly, competitions put lots of pressure on young children and if they can show their abilities in this situation, they definitely will have more self-confidence for dealing with the arduous problems and tasks. Take a personal experience as an example. When I was a child, I was take a part in boxing competitions. I was younger than my opponent and I had lots of stress. But, after finishing my match, I learned that I should not afraid of my problems and I should work hard to reach my goals.
The other important reason crossing my mind now is that student should see the results of their efforts. When a young children experience a victory, he will not need any other motivation for his career because, after this situation, he will do whatever he can to experience it again. For instance, a young boy how previously won acclaimed as the best runner in my country, now works harder to become a well-known runner and experience more victories in his life.
The last but not the least reason by which claim is justified is that young children should experience failure and get familiar with the real life. To illustrate, I would like to mention some available statistics about this point. The result of a survey recently conducted in my country clearly depicts that more that 65 percent of students how experience failure before, can easily withstand different problems of the study in the other cities` colleges. This means that failures in the sport competitions pave students` way to deal with their future problems.
From what has been discussed above, we may safely reach the conclusion that sport competitions is essential for young children because they can help them to improve their basic skills. Furthermore, I believe that competitions can prepare children for their future. All in all, it is anticipated that in future people will pay more heed to improve their young children`s abilities by allowing them to take apart in the exciting sport competitions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
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Message: Are you missing a verb?
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'well', 'as to', 'for instance', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220560747664 0.229887763892 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.151401869159 0.158761421928 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0878504672897 0.0866891130778 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0467289719626 0.046263068375 101% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0747663551402 0.0685040099705 109% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123364485981 0.118717715034 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0336448598131 0.0351676179071 96% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.04052502727 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0261682242991 0.0309702414327 84% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0822429906542 0.0887237588012 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0317757009346 0.0209618222197 152% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0224299065421 0.0139019557991 161% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2902.0 2387.08602151 122% => OK
No of words: 471.0 408.028673835 115% => OK
Chars per words: 6.16135881104 5.86048508987 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.371549893843 0.338922669872 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.295116772824 0.251872472559 117% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.222929936306 0.174417080927 128% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.157112526539 0.112833075102 139% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04052502727 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51804670913 0.524397521467 99% => OK
Word variations: 60.6243646857 59.2087087015 102% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.4090909091 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9480878585 48.84282405 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.909090909 120.699889404 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4090909091 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.409090909091 0.644075263715 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 50.9207681915 45.7405998639 111% => OK
Elegance: 1.38356164384 1.45489161554 95% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244022564887 0.300154397459 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.101673473157 0.103427244359 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0699425929726 0.0752933317313 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.465708515512 0.497263757937 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.15298357906 0.151897553556 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849859095974 0.114077575197 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705003139942 0.0781384742642 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.308604556533 0.336927656856 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0208005515908 0.067059652881 31% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160050831182 0.210909579961 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570513907987 0.0618886996521 92% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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