The author of the argument states that the city of Slimvilee have observed some positive changes regarding their exercise habits.This according to him will cause the obesity rate of the city of Slimville to go below the national average. However it is necessary to find out what is meant by a healthy lifestyle. The author claims that there has been significant improvement in exercise habits of the people. But, is that the only indicator of healthy lifestyle? It may happen that the people
exercise regularly but do not maintain proper eating habits which may eventually lead to the spreading of diseases thus affecting their lifestyle. Hence, it needs to be answered as to what is meant by healthy lifestyle.
The author tells that his claims are based on the results of a recent survey. But it is not stated how recent the survey is. It is important to know when the survey was conducted and who were the respondents. The survey results indicate that the residents of the city have adopted healthy habits and are following the recommendations of
doctors and fitness experts. Besides, it is possible that the doctors have scaled down the recommended daily exercise in comparison to what they recommended 7 years ago.If that is not the case,still, the argument does not provide information on the sample size and the place where the survey was conducted. If the survey is conducted in near the jogger's park then, naturally the sample will contain people who are health conscious. Even if the survey is conducted at various places including shopping malls and restaurants, it is possible that the respondents didn't answer to the survey veraciously. For author's argument to be valid, it must comment about the reliability of the survey.
Further, the author of the argument need to look into other factors which are responsible for physical fitness of the person. Just talking walks will not prove to be helpful if the person is not following proper diet. Although, healthy food habits and daily exercise is the key to good health, it is not the only thing which needs to be taken care of and it will be of no use if the person doesn't follow proper schedule. Sporadic eating and irregular exercise schedules may lead to obesity. Good sleep is another factor in fighting obesity. The author mentions nothing
about other lifestyle changes. Unless author considers the factors mentioned above, he can't conclusively state that the people of the city have moved towards healthier lifestyle in the last 7 years.
Moreover, the author claims that several of the gymnasiums have been shut down. What caused the gymnasiums to be shut down?Were they not making profits? Have people moved to other activities? If yes, what are those activities? What fraction of the gym-goers are still involved in some other activity? The argument fails to answer these questions. The author makes an unfair comparison between gymnasiums and sports complexes. While a gymnasium is purely for exercise, a sports complex may be visited by spectators who enjoy watching matches played by other. Also, the sports complex often has a cafeteria. There is no indications of the enrollment of people into activities at sports complex. Thus the footfalls to sports complex may actually represent customers of the cafeteria . Even if we consider that all the people visiting sports complex are involved in some activity, the author tells that the sports complex observes full attendance occasionally. As stated above, such random exercise will not contribute towards a healthy lifestyle.
It is unclear why the author has considered the lifestyle of the city of Slimville and ignored other cities. Is the trend popular only in the city of Slimville? If the author has come up with this argument after great degree of research and delibiration, it is not at all apparent in the argument. Thus the author fails to justify how the
city of Slimville will outstand the national obesity rate. It would have been wise for the author to consider all these points.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'besides', 'but', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'thus', 'while', 'as to']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.243502051984 0.25644967241 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.184678522572 0.15541462614 119% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0738714090287 0.0836205057962 88% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0424076607387 0.0520304965353 82% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0287277701778 0.0272364105082 105% => OK
Prepositions: 0.116279069767 0.125424944231 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0533515731874 0.0416121511921 128% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.6513275004 2.79052419416 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0287277701778 0.026700313972 108% => OK
Particles: 0.00683994528044 0.001811407834 378% => OK
Determiners: 0.123119015048 0.113004496875 109% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0177838577291 0.0255425247493 70% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0246238030096 0.0127820249294 193% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 4037.0 2731.13054187 148% => OK
No of words: 671.0 446.07635468 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.01639344262 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.08956458786 4.57801047555 111% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.391952309985 0.378187486979 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.275707898659 0.287650121315 96% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.199701937407 0.208842608468 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.126676602086 0.135150697306 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6513275004 2.79052419416 95% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 207.018472906 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439642324888 0.469332199767 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.7406454114 52.1807786196 105% => OK
How many sentences: 39.0 20.039408867 195% => Less sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 17.2051282051 23.2022227129 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6436369469 57.7814097925 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.512820513 141.986410481 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2051282051 23.2022227129 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.435897435897 0.724660767414 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 5.14285714286 175% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 3.58251231527 475% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 44.775918071 51.9672348444 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.61497326203 1.8405768891 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242987861192 0.441005458295 55% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.132256745172 0.135418324435 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0885969960982 0.0829849096947 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.514156418262 0.58762219726 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.20852528749 0.147661913831 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888970745127 0.193483328276 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670710906178 0.0970749176394 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.393547064735 0.42659136922 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.139398938418 0.0774707102158 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161497620675 0.312017818177 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515254114617 0.0698173142475 74% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.33743842365 192% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.87684729064 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.82512315271 290% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 6.46551724138 155% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 5.36822660099 149% => OK
Neutral topic words: 12.0 2.82389162562 425% => Less neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 30.0 14.657635468 205% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More arguments wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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