The author of the argument states that in in response to the Vitamin A deficiency in the people of Tagus, and with the upcoming of an international organisation with a new variety of millet able to curb the deficiency, the government must promote this new type of millet. However, this argument is based on several assumptions and is thus flawed.
First of all, the author states that the international organisation came up with new variety of millet which has potential to curb the vitamin A deficiency. But it is unclear what are the plans of the organisation. Does to organisation aims to sell it's millet in other countries? If that is so, then the citizens of Tagus will not be benefited from the cultivation of the new type of millet. It is important to know what is the target market for the company, in order to support the author's recommendation.
Also, the author has broadly stated that there is deficiency of Vitamin A in the citizens of Tagus, but there is no confirmation of the fact in the argument. What are the tests carried out for detection of the deficiency? What percentage of the total population are affected? What age group of the total population is affected? Is the deficiency severe?Unless these questions are answered, it is difficult to back the author's suggestion.
Also, it is unclear why the author has considered new variety of millet as the only possible cure. Are there any other methods to curb the problem of Vitamin deficiency? In most cases, Vitamin deficiency can be cured by taking vitamin supplements. Apart from that, other natural ways such as increasing the intake of vitamin A rich foods can prove to be helpful. Have people tried those traditional methods? If yes, then were those methods of no use? It would be wise for the other to consider all those factors.
Moreover, the author that farming of the millet is costly and thus the seeds are subsidized and that the government of Tagus must support the cultivation of the new type of millet. But, the author doesn't provide plans of the organisation. Is the cultivation going to take place in Tagus?The government of Tagus cannot support the cultivation for another country. The author's claim must provide the definite plans of the organisation and how the citizens of Tagus will be benefited from the plan.
In general, it can be said that the author's has failed to make a convincing argument. The writer's argument ends with an entirely unjustified optimistic recommendation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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The author of the argument states that in in response to the Vitamin A deficiency in...
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...or the company, in order to support the authors recommendation. Also, the author has...
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...opulation is affected? Is the deficiency severe?Unless these questions are answer...
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...e answered, it is difficult to back the authors suggestion. Also, it is unclear why...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'apart from', 'in general', 'such as', 'first of all', 'in most cases']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.252136752137 0.25644967241 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.155982905983 0.15541462614 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0726495726496 0.0836205057962 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0405982905983 0.0520304965353 78% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0149572649573 0.0272364105082 55% => OK
Prepositions: 0.134615384615 0.125424944231 107% => OK
Participles: 0.034188034188 0.0416121511921 82% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.88631137154 2.79052419416 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0277777777778 0.026700313972 104% => OK
Particles: 0.00213675213675 0.001811407834 118% => OK
Determiners: 0.147435897436 0.113004496875 130% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0213675213675 0.0255425247493 84% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.017094017094 0.0127820249294 134% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2489.0 2731.13054187 91% => OK
No of words: 422.0 446.07635468 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.8981042654 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.324644549763 0.378187486979 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.260663507109 0.287650121315 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175355450237 0.208842608468 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.130331753555 0.135150697306 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88631137154 2.79052419416 103% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 207.018472906 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.419431279621 0.469332199767 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.0125965428 52.1807786196 86% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 16.88 23.2022227129 73% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2874253594 57.7814097925 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.56 141.986410481 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.88 23.2022227129 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.56 0.724660767414 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 3.58251231527 307% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 42.9463507109 51.9672348444 83% => OK
Elegance: 1.9898989899 1.8405768891 108% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426673133221 0.441005458295 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.143235024977 0.135418324435 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.122274487469 0.0829849096947 147% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.579326217937 0.58762219726 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.183996808621 0.147661913831 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.166333804648 0.193483328276 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108476316815 0.0970749176394 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.45873053001 0.42659136922 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.172310566457 0.0774707102158 222% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.304540010445 0.312017818177 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102145346019 0.0698173142475 146% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.87684729064 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 14.657635468 116% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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