Essay topics: “Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainville is such an area. Plainville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainville’s schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.”
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The author says that a chain of stores called “Nature's Way” will open soon in the town of Plainville. He claims that these stores will be extremely successful and provides countable reasons. That reasons are not clear and have a lot of holes and hidden points. There are a lot of information required for author to prove his argument.
First of all, the author states that the new stores will sell health food and other products that are considered healthy but he does not mention any information about the type of that product. Maybe the stores will sell some type of sport machines that are not preferable from the people in PlainVille. Moreover, we do not even know what are the differences between the products that Nature's Way stores will provide and the products that are available in the old other stores. Furthermore, the author does not state any piece of information about the prices and offers that the stores will provide and what are the strategies that the stores will follow to gain the most possible count of customers in the least possible time.
Second, the author depends on some information about the life and people in Plainville to strengthen his argument but most of that information is vague. First, he depends on a report says that Plainville merchants sales many sport issues like running shoes and exercise clothes but we do not know anything about the responsible of that report and how correct is it?. In addition, if we consider that the report is 100 percent correct, there is no clear connection between running shoes and exercise clothes in one side and the predicted success for Nature's Way stores in the other side. Maybe there are many sport teams in the town and that is the reason why the payments are high. Furthermore, we do not know that ratio between payments the population in Plainville to consider it high or low.
Finally, someone may attack my arguments and says schoolchildren are tend to be more interesting in fitness program and regular exercise in Plainville and that is considered a strong reason to predict success for new stores. It is obvious that there is a global trend for all people and schools to make children healthier and encourage them to make sports and exercises regulary. Moreover, regular exercises that the author uses in his argument do not any special equipments or tool. Consequently, there is not any connection with between the predicated success and that reason.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 70, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...y arguments and says schoolchildren are tend to be more interesting in fitness progr...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'in addition', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.254424778761 0.25644967241 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.148230088496 0.15541462614 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0884955752212 0.0836205057962 106% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0486725663717 0.0520304965353 94% => OK
Pronouns: 0.033185840708 0.0272364105082 122% => OK
Prepositions: 0.117256637168 0.125424944231 93% => OK
Participles: 0.0132743362832 0.0416121511921 32% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.59702819291 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0176991150442 0.026700313972 66% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.112831858407 0.113004496875 100% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0176991150442 0.0255425247493 69% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0176991150442 0.0127820249294 138% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2454.0 2731.13054187 90% => OK
No of words: 417.0 446.07635468 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.88489208633 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.342925659472 0.378187486979 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.254196642686 0.287650121315 88% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.167865707434 0.208842608468 80% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.112709832134 0.135150697306 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59702819291 2.79052419416 93% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 207.018472906 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436450839329 0.469332199767 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 46.8536785719 52.1807786196 90% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 24.5294117647 23.2022227129 106% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8381420743 57.7814097925 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.352941176 141.986410481 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5294117647 23.2022227129 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.764705882353 0.724660767414 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.14285714286 78% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 49.9490760333 51.9672348444 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.67307692308 1.8405768891 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321512311172 0.441005458295 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.199934503672 0.135418324435 148% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0905008622548 0.0829849096947 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.604900097452 0.58762219726 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.134297005631 0.147661913831 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144174457135 0.193483328276 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723104904917 0.0970749176394 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.494368468622 0.42659136922 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0391157068589 0.0774707102158 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236205099859 0.312017818177 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464614447067 0.0698173142475 67% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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