Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
According to the argument it says about the store named nature's way which is based on selling health-related products and to be launced in plainsville and the reason behind this is that people in plainsville who live healthy lives and the speaker gives us the information on the health clubs and aerobic classes are always busy in plainsville.
Firstly i would say that the speaker should have given more detailed information about the nature's way company as he says it has chain of stores which sells healthy food so what type of healthy food and what type of products they have in the stores.It is given that store has to prove to be very successful does that mean it wasn't successfull in any particular place previously and how successful are they in other places should had been more convincing.It would have been more helpful if there was a clear data of profits of areas which has the residents lead to healthy lives.
Secondly it states that plainsville merchant report gives information that sales running shoes and exercise clothing are always high so how much high was it increased from previous should have been more helpful to understand the argument and also it is given that weight training and aerobics classes are always full so the reason behind it is not clear there might be offers provided by them or any other reason which was not stated by the speaker.
Thirdly i would say that the speaker mentions schoolchildren are represented as new generation of potential customers it would be more eloquent what exactly the phrase referred to potential customers and the fitness-for-life program is it for free or they charge for children and what kind of fitness are included in the program has not been given clearly.
In the conclusion i would say that the argument would have been more convincing if the speaker could have given more information and provided sufficient data to understand more about the plainsville healthy lifestyle and the reason behind the nature's way store to open in the area with more eloquent data
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 351 350
No. of Characters: 1684 1500
No. of Different Words: 153 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.328 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.798 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.605 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 58.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.315 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.529 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.894 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.189 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 9, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...lways busy in plainsville. Firstly i would say that the speaker should have ...
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Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'chained'.
Suggestion: chained
...e natures way company as he says it has chain of stores which sells healthy food so w...
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Line 5, column 250, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...ype of products they have in the stores.It is given that store has to prove to be ...
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Line 5, column 326, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...to be very successful does that mean it wasnt successfull in any particular place pre...
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Line 5, column 455, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
... places should had been more convincing.It would have been more helpful if there w...
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Line 13, column 9, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...not stated by the speaker. Thirdly i would say that the speaker mentions sch...
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Line 17, column 19, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...n given clearly. In the conclusion i would say that the argument would have ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, as to, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 348.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91666666667 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63537395159 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445402298851 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 69.0 22.8473053892 302% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.2914034898 57.8364921388 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 342.2 119.503703932 286% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 69.6 23.324526521 298% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.6 5.70786347227 273% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187388295388 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108737951815 0.0743258471296 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793281061715 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108737951815 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0793281061715 0.0628817314937 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 36.5 14.3799401198 254% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 9.9 48.3550499002 20% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 29.0 12.197005988 238% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.44 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.92 8.32208582834 119% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 12.3882235529 218% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 29.6 11.1389221557 266% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 30.0 11.9071856287 252% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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