Parents need to prepare their children for every adversity that life can throw at them. They need to instill a right attitude in them. Children in their teenage years, preparing to enter adult life should be taught valuable lessons that would endure for a life time. Parent should encourage teens into taking up part-time jobs to give them a first hand experience of adult life.
When teens work for part time they learn the value of money. Today we see many kids using iphones, ipads and stereos. They take this gadgets for granted and do not realize the effort that their parents put in, to earn these exorbitantly priced technologies. By pursuing part time jobs they learn how hard it is to earn money, they start calculating the amount of hours they need to work to be able to afford a phone which is a basic aminity. When children earn with hardwork, they will also be judicious about spending and not indulge in impulsive buying. They will start to evaluate if the thing they desire is worth its value in money, is there another economical alternative and will be efficiently used after purchase. These are the factors that they would not consider, if they are being provided with prodigious pocket money. Also, they will refrain from spending on drugs and alcohol.
A part time job is a great way to utilize free time that teenagers have on their hand. Teens devote significant amount of time on computer games, parties, concerts, chatting and social media. These donot add to their values or learning. The internet is raft with scams where teens are the victim. Social media sites are known for encouranging enorexia among girls. Influential celebrities exhort depravity and reckless behavoir. Teenagers are not mature enough to discern right from wrong and hence fall prey to the many decoys that online world offers. Instead if they are employed in a part time job, they would have less time for these activities. It would in a way protect them from bad influences, that are meretricious and hard to quit.
Thus, children should be encouraged by their parents in taking up part time jobs. Their time would not be wasted and will be utilized in learning important life lessons. They will value the money that they earn and think twice before squandering it on items with no utilitarian value.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...aluable lessons that would endure for a life time. Parent should encourage teens into tak...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...e of adult life. When teens work for part time they learn the value of money. Today we...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...g iphones, ipads and stereos. They take this gadgets for granted and do not realize ...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...tantly priced technologies. By pursuing part time jobs they learn how hard it is to earn ...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...rom spending on drugs and alcohol. A part time job is a great way to utilize free time...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...e many decoys that online world offers. Instead if they are employed in a part time job...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...fers. Instead if they are employed in a part time job, they would have less time for thes...
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ncouraged by their parents in taking up part time jobs. Their time would not be wasted an...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'thus']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.251152073733 0.229887763892 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.193548387097 0.158761421928 122% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0691244239631 0.0866891130778 80% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0391705069124 0.046263068375 85% => OK
Pronouns: 0.073732718894 0.0685040099705 108% => OK
Prepositions: 0.10599078341 0.118717715034 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0552995391705 0.0351676179071 157% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.36666014605 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0345622119816 0.0309702414327 112% => OK
Particles: 0.00460829493088 0.00188951952338 244% => OK
Determiners: 0.0599078341014 0.0887237588012 68% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0345622119816 0.0209618222197 165% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0184331797235 0.0139019557991 133% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2307.0 2387.08602151 97% => OK
No of words: 396.0 408.028673835 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.82575757576 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.290404040404 0.338922669872 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.20202020202 0.251872472559 80% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.14898989899 0.174417080927 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0858585858586 0.112833075102 76% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36666014605 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540404040404 0.524397521467 103% => OK
Word variations: 61.074975657 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 16.5 20.5533526081 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7176183961 48.84282405 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.125 120.699889404 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.5533526081 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.291666666667 0.644075263715 45% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.54480286738 144% => OK
Readability: 36.702020202 45.7405998639 80% => OK
Elegance: 1.34586466165 1.45489161554 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33072825617 0.300154397459 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0848643886753 0.103427244359 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0703647985163 0.0752933317313 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.42986659483 0.497263757937 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.134392095463 0.151897553556 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112593304575 0.114077575197 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656434044286 0.0781384742642 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.273443738309 0.336927656856 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0780402833608 0.067059652881 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230411156574 0.210909579961 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064289325914 0.0618886996521 104% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.