TPO-11 - Independent Writing Task Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?Use specific reasons and examples to support you

Although many people thinks that internet and other virtual maybe become a truble for us, but I think that this new technology instrument have many useful benefits for our daily life. This benefits can be categourize in three main parts: helpful in my professional job, solve our daily neccesity, and bringing freedom for us.
First, nowadays by developing the internet technology all arount the world, internet network becoming one of the reachable and reliable source that solve our problems. with this instrument we can access to many peolpe that are master in our jobs. For example, I am working in consulting firm for two years. At first, I have many problems that I was not tought in university, but by searching my problems, one by one, on the internet and becoming friend with many peoples like me, I can over come to this big issue.
Second, during a day we confronts many diverse problems in our daily life that bring us many questions and all the time we can not access to experts to ask for solutions from them. By searching in the internet about different issues, we can find best answers to them. For example a few days ago, I was feeling terrible headache in my front of my head. It was so late to call with our family's doctor so I rearched on the internet for this keywords "headache reasons" and I read about the all reasons and finally I could find a solution for it. Because I walk about 5 hours under the sunshine I loose my body's water that causes my headache.
Third, this days all news about politics and economics are broadcasting to entire the world and every things that happen in each country are dispers to all around the world. All governmets know that if the do anything agains the human right, the will known as a dictaro. the point is that becaouse of this reasons no one don't do anything agains the rule.
becouse of preceding reasons I think that we can use the internet in the right way and improve our lifestyle like many modern countries. If we use this tools in a right way, we would not create problems.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 168, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: With
...eliable source that solve our problems. with this instrument we can access to many p...
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Line 3, column 25, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'we' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'confront'
Suggestion: confront
...his big issue. Second, during a day we confronts many diverse problems in our daily life...
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Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...octor so I rearched on the internet for this keywords 'headache reasons' a...
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Line 3, column 553, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...finally I could find a solution for it. Because I walk about 5 hours under the sunshine...
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Line 3, column 603, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...walk about 5 hours under the sunshine I loose my bodys water that causes my headache....
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Line 4, column 8, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... water that causes my headache. Third, this days all news about politics and econom...
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Line 4, column 202, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... the world. All governmets know that if the do anything agains the human right, the wi...
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Line 4, column 271, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...man right, the will known as a dictaro. the point is that becaouse of this reasons ...
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Line 4, column 301, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... dictaro. the point is that becaouse of this reasons no one dont do anything agains ...
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Line 4, column 321, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...is that becaouse of this reasons no one dont do anything agains the rule. becouse o...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Becouse
... one dont do anything agains the rule. becouse of preceding reasons I think that we ca...
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Line 5, column 158, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a right way" with adverb for "right"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... modern countries. If we use this tools in a right way, we would not create problems.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'for example', 'i think']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235294117647 0.229887763892 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.132352941176 0.158761421928 83% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0833333333333 0.0866891130778 96% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0220588235294 0.046263068375 48% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0980392156863 0.0685040099705 143% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.139705882353 0.118717715034 118% => OK
Participles: 0.0367647058824 0.0351676179071 105% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.48927134355 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0196078431373 0.0309702414327 63% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0980392156863 0.0887237588012 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0220588235294 0.0209618222197 105% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00980392156863 0.0139019557991 71% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2052.0 2387.08602151 86% => OK
No of words: 368.0 408.028673835 90% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57608695652 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.309782608696 0.338922669872 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.220108695652 0.251872472559 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.157608695652 0.174417080927 90% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0788043478261 0.112833075102 70% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48927134355 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532608695652 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 58.3124237294 59.2087087015 98% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.5533526081 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9693265289 48.84282405 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.25 120.699889404 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.5533526081 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.644075263715 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.54480286738 216% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 45.0108695652 45.7405998639 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.63106796117 1.45489161554 112% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210017563499 0.300154397459 70% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.126213626955 0.103427244359 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0913890350035 0.0752933317313 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.567418666223 0.497263757937 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.15642056333 0.151897553556 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858975303982 0.114077575197 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473283633769 0.0781384742642 61% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.298263563885 0.336927656856 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0691740034483 0.067059652881 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133755072414 0.210909579961 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346599851199 0.0618886996521 56% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 13.6433691756 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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