With the fast development of technology, we can access to the news more and more convenient than the past. Some people thinks that it is unnecessary for an individual to know the events seems will not affect our daily life, however, I personally agree with the view that people should know the events happening around the world, and there are serval reasons to support.
The first reason why people should know about events happening in our world is that those kinds of affairs can rich our knowledges about the world. For those kinds of people who want to be more success in the modern society, it is important for them to understand the important things happening in the world. For instance, after knowing that the Internet in US is growing fast, Jack Ma created a company doing internet trade in China, and this company is one of the biggest IT company today.
Furthermore, knowing what is happening around the world makes people more prepared for incoming economic crisis. Since the world's economy is far more connected than before, it is more easier for an economic crisis wide spread around the world. For example, the economic crisis in 2008 makes lots of bank lose all of their money, and people in many countries can not find a job. If people do some preparation when they know that the economic crisis is happening in the US, the cost would be much less.
Finally, people's life gets more enjoyable when their knowing things happening around the world. Nowadays, people suffer from more and more pressure in their life, so that it is important for them to have a relax. When people watches funny news far away from their life, they can forget about their real life for a moment, it is benefit for them to reduce the stress and gain more satisfaction in life.
In conclusion, knowing about events happening far away from daily life will not only enriches people's knowledge about the world, but also makes people do more preparation about incoming crisis and improves people's life quality.
- TPO-42 - Independent Writing Task Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 61
- TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 70
- TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the 80
- TPO-43 - Integrated Writing Task Agnostids were a group of marine animals that became extinct about 450 million years ago. Agnostid fossils can be found in rocks in many areas around the world. From the fossil remains, we know that agnostids were primitiv 83
- TPO-42 - Independent Writing Task Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 478, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'companies'?
Suggestion: companies
...d this company is one of the biggest IT company today. Furthermore, knowing what is ...
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Line 5, column 124, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
...for incoming economic crisis. Since the worlds economy is far more connected than befo...
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Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...s far more connected than before, it is more easier for an economic crisis wide spread arou...
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Line 5, column 292, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun bank seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of banks'.
Suggestion: lots of banks
...mple, the economic crisis in 2008 makes lots of bank lose all of their money, and people in ...
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Line 7, column 205, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...o that it is important for them to have a relax. When people watches funny news far awa...
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Line 9, column 86, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'will' requires base form of the verb: 'enrich'
Suggestion: enrich
... far away from daily life will not only enriches peoples knowledge about the world, but ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.23746701847 0.229887763892 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.153034300792 0.158761421928 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0844327176781 0.0866891130778 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0580474934037 0.046263068375 125% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0527704485488 0.0685040099705 77% => OK
Prepositions: 0.142480211082 0.118717715034 120% => OK
Participles: 0.0395778364116 0.0351676179071 113% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.30423685872 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0184696569921 0.0309702414327 60% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0949868073879 0.0887237588012 107% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.023746701847 0.0209618222197 113% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0158311345646 0.0139019557991 114% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2004.0 2387.08602151 84% => OK
No of words: 346.0 408.028673835 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.79190751445 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48200974243 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.341040462428 0.338922669872 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.199421965318 0.251872472559 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.135838150289 0.174417080927 78% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0838150289017 0.112833075102 74% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30423685872 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465317919075 0.524397521467 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 47.5421564858 59.2087087015 80% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6684587814 63% => OK
Sentence length: 26.6153846154 20.5533526081 129% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0502695348 48.84282405 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.153846154 120.699889404 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6153846154 20.5533526081 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.846153846154 0.644075263715 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 46.5575811472 45.7405998639 102% => OK
Elegance: 1.59 1.45489161554 109% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384020964888 0.300154397459 128% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.193508311037 0.103427244359 187% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0891748042237 0.0752933317313 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.689525113487 0.497263757937 139% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130740754764 0.151897553556 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.188139408942 0.114077575197 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821212567506 0.0781384742642 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.378674672224 0.336927656856 112% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0668804962825 0.067059652881 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259854958646 0.210909579961 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065107991872 0.0618886996521 105% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8870967742 50% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.