Nowadays people are forgetting national celebrations and enjoying themselves on other days that are important to them personally. Discuss and give your opinion.
In this rampant age of globalization, nowadays,it is bitter truth that the importance of national celebrations has been sent at the back seat by the substantial changes in the living standard. By contrast, the tendency to commemorate personal events is mushrooming at present among new generation. Here, I would adore to establish both sides with my own perception.
To set in, there are numerous points endorsing my point of view. First and foremost, it is well said that ''elevating inflation including hiking outlay of accomodation, education and rates of taxes has got on the nerves of people...
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Tnk u very much sir In last
Tnk u very much sir
In last essay's evaluation u mentioned that spelling erors play a little role in the essay deserving 8.0+
So now u have mentioned that u could get 8.5 in my above essay without spelling erors...
May I know why I could not achieve 8.5 bands in my above essay ????
5 spelling errors are
5 spelling errors are tolerable, but 10 spelling errors are too much in one essay. The message is mainly to remind you that it still could be a big issue in real test to have a lot of spelling errors.
This essay can get 8.5 or above doesn't mean last essay can get 8.5 even though the spelling errors are less.
The correct thing for you to do is: do a spell check after you finished typing the essay. It takes only 2-3 minutes. Do it by your own, don't use automatic spell checker.
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Sentence: In a nutshell, after doing a great deal of thought and deliberations, I would assert that there is a great need to evolve affection among upcoming generationtowards national celebrations that is crucial to create a sense of unity to ensure betterment of the country
Description: The fragment national celebrations that is not usually followed by is
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace is with are
Sentence: As a result, installing the spirit of patriotism among youngesters seems 'far cry' for senior folk which further leads to less interst in national events.
Error: youngesters Suggestion: youngsters
Error: interst Suggestion: interest
Sentence: All of above, the disintigeration among relationships of community memebers may make it onerous for people to get togther to celebrate these events with harmony.
Error: disintigeration Suggestion: disintegration
Error: memebers Suggestion: members
Error: togther Suggestion: together
Sentence: On the contrary, personal events icluding dancing on dj floor, live singing and dancing concerts, delicious multi cuisines in a vintage restaurant to make thier personal achievements more memorable are considered more enjoyable instead of joining national ceromonies comprising declaimation contests, exhibitions of school children, flag hoisting ceremony etc. Consequently, the significance of national festivals is fading by and by with the passage of time.
Error: declaimation Suggestion: declaration
Error: icluding Suggestion: including
Error: thier Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: ceromonies Suggestion: ceremonies
Sentence: In a nutshell, after doing a great deal of thought and deliberations, I would assert that there is a great need to evolve affection among upcoming generationtowards national celebrations that is crucial to create a sense of unity to ensure betterment of the country
Error: generationtowards Suggestion: generation towards
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No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
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Score: 8.0 out of 9 (This essay can get 8.5 or over without spelling errors)
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 399 350
No. of Characters: 2146 1500
No. of Different Words: 244 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.469 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.378 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.027 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 135 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.692 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.613 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.049 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5