People nowadays live longer than they used to. What caused this situation? Is it a negative or positive development?
It is an unquestionable fact that our contemporaries have a longer life than our predecessors. This change happened due to many reasons such as advance of medicine, technology and economic prosperity. Below we look at those reasons in more details.
Firstly, our understanding of ourselves has increased tremendously since 1900s. We learn widespread reasons of illnesses and sickness and learned how to handle them. For instance, vaccination helped us fight illnesses which killed off a half of Europe’s population in 1700s. Moreover, with surgery we are able cure previously incurable diseases and traumas. For example, if you were stubbed by a knife in 1800s, you will probably die in case any inner organs was damaged, by contrast, today if an ambulance arrived in time, you will survive. In other words, our knowledge and advancement of technology have led to remarkable increase of an average life span.
Secondly, today in general we are much wealthier than ever before. This economic prosperity allowed us making medical care available for many. Although we tend to take our modern medicine for granted, we ought to remember that in the past only a small part of humanity had enough money to pay for medical care. By contrast, today almost any employed person might allow buying insurance. For instance, in 1900s in Russia there were less than ten hospitals available for common people in the whole state, moreover only a wealthy peasant or merchant could pay money to seek help in them. At the same time today Russian Federation has thousands of hospitals which are available for all citizens for free.
Finally, it seems that the increase of longevity is a positive achievement but at the same time it brings several serious troubles such in average modern population is less healthy. Persons who would have died in the past now are giving offspring who are even less healthy. Moreover, elderly become an financial burden for many developed countries because those states have to spend significant amount of money on health care and pensions. At the same time, I tend to believe that this longevity has a positive effect on our society and all negative facets will be overcome in nearest future. For example, a recent advancement in genetics will allow us to make our children healthier than we are.
In conclusion, we have started to live longer because of our technology and medicine and I deeply believe that our future advancement in those fields will tackle or negative consequences of the change.
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Sentence: At the same time, I tend to believe that this longevity has a positive effect on our society and all negative facets will be overcome in nearest future.
Description: The token in is not usually followed by an adjective, superlative
Suggestion: Refer to in and nearest
flaws:
We may not like pronouns as subjects in sentences. It is great if they can be removed or replaced. Look:
For example, if
you were stubbed by a knife in 1800s,
you will probably die in case any inner organs was damaged, by contrast, today if an ambulance arrived in time,
you will survive.
revised:
A stub by a knife in 1800s may cause a person die in case any inner organs was damaged, by contrast, today if an ambulance arrived in time, there are more opportunities to survive.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 416 350
No. of Characters: 2051 1500
No. of Different Words: 230 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.516 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.93 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.657 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.81 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.595 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.485 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Thank you, for your advice.
Thank you, for your advice. The revised sentence is a way better. I will use this idea in my future essays. If you have any suggestions or recommendations, please share them with me, I deeply appreciate your effort to help me as well as your professional expertise.
Eugene.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 408, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1800s'.
Suggestion: in the 1800s
...example, if you were stubbed by a knife in 1800s, you will probably die in case any inne...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 402, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1900s'.
Suggestion: in the 1900s
...t allow buying insurance. For instance, in 1900s in Russia there were less than ten hosp...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 300, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... less healthy. Moreover, elderly become an financial burden for many developed cou...
^^
Line 7, column 575, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'in the nearest'.
Suggestion: in the nearest
...nd all negative facets will be overcome in nearest future. For example, a recent advanceme...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 203, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...or negative consequences of the change.
^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'look', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'in general', 'such as', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.225596529284 0.229887763892 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.138828633406 0.158761421928 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.127982646421 0.0866891130778 148% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0412147505423 0.046263068375 89% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0672451193059 0.0685040099705 98% => OK
Prepositions: 0.147505422993 0.118717715034 124% => OK
Participles: 0.0281995661605 0.0351676179071 80% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75624521998 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0238611713666 0.0309702414327 77% => OK
Particles: 0.00216919739696 0.00188951952338 115% => OK
Determiners: 0.0650759219089 0.0887237588012 73% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0195227765727 0.0209618222197 93% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0108459869848 0.0139019557991 78% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2529.0 2387.08602151 106% => OK
No of words: 416.0 408.028673835 102% => OK
Chars per words: 6.07932692308 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.382211538462 0.338922669872 113% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.295673076923 0.251872472559 117% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.221153846154 0.174417080927 127% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.134615384615 0.112833075102 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75624521998 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557692307692 0.524397521467 106% => OK
Word variations: 65.2504255207 59.2087087015 110% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.8095238095 20.5533526081 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2089310212 48.84282405 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.428571429 120.699889404 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8095238095 20.5533526081 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.761904761905 0.644075263715 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 49.3768315018 45.7405998639 108% => OK
Elegance: 1.62280701754 1.45489161554 112% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122486136664 0.300154397459 41% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0609910933035 0.103427244359 59% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0618247636921 0.0752933317313 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.443826536855 0.497263757937 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.166039173944 0.151897553556 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0415058825568 0.114077575197 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042754183081 0.0781384742642 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.290879470035 0.336927656856 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0500092879142 0.067059652881 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.088677699758 0.210909579961 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391540829757 0.0618886996521 63% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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