As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reason

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As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Submitted by Phoebe on Wed, 11/23/2016 - 12:44

Despite the obvious benefits that technology has brought us, may people are concerned about its drawbacks. Among them, some people worried that as we rely more and more on technology to solve problems, our ability to think for ourselves will be certainly curtailed. This concern is reasonable in a way yet not necessary in most cases.

In a way. the use of technology does not involve the process of thinking. It therefore will not exert any impact on people’s thinking. Take our daily use of transportations such as cars, trains, and airplanes for instance. They are tools and take use to where we need do go. For example, I have a daily schedule. I need to think how should I arrange my meetings, classes, and exercises so that I can finish everything on time. Okay, say, I need to host the meeting at work, have my class in the evening and then go to the gym afterwards. To efficiently do so, I need my car to take me where I need to be. As we can see, the car is nothing but a tool. It neither helps me nor thwarts me with my think process of arranging my daily plan. So, some technology provide people tools to achieve certain goals; yet, it has nothing to do with the ability of thinking.

In addition, the more people use technology, the more we need to think because people tend to compete in using the most effective ways to achieve desired goals. Considering there are so many forms of technology are available, if one does not keep thinking and stay updated, they may be left behind by their colleges. For example, as a teach myself, I have never ceased to explore more and newer technology and utilize it in my teaching. For example, there are over one hundred apps for teaching English pronunciation. In order to help students choose the one fit for them individually, I need to analyze different features of different apps to target the needs of my students. This is only one small area of my teaching. Besides, all other teachers at my school are doing the same. Everyone is trying to integrate technology with teaching effectively, which pushes us to keep thinking.

On the other hand, as we relying on more on technology, we may tend to get lazy. Since we can get the answers online, why would we go through the trouble to think. For example, it I want to how to convert word document to PDF form. I can get the answer in two minutes simply by googling it. This is true. However, the problem with getting answers online is not all information is reliable. Take another question for example. Someone is wondering why there are rashes on his arm all of a sudden. There may be over 10 pages and over one hundred items to answer the question; nonetheless, these answers do not agree with each other. Now, to choose the correct treatment, he will need to ponder over it rather than randomly pick one solution. As we can see, people tend to be lazy and skip the thinking process for themselves; still, due to the abundance of the information and choices, they will have for think for themselves.

In conclusion, technology is surely a double-bladed sword. While bringing countless benefits, It has caused many environmental and safety related issues. Just because we need to keep thinking how to deal with these disadvantages, we need to keep thinking while we are using more and more technology. Plus, technology does not just serve us, we need to make them to do so and also in an effect way, which requires us to think.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 11, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... necessary in most cases. In a way. the use of technology does not involve the ...
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Line 5, column 334, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...hind by their colleges. For example, as a teach myself, I have never ceased to explore ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in most cases, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.4196629213 209% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 33.0505617978 218% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 58.6224719101 147% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2837.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 616.0 442.535393258 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60551948052 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98190197535 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66361180708 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467532467532 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 898.2 704.065955056 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 24.0 6.24550561798 384% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 38.0 20.2370786517 188% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2421213294 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.6578947368 118.986275619 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2105263158 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78947368421 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 18.0 4.83258426966 372% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204313299538 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473431852113 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056140498741 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138917315358 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564526432409 0.0667264976115 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 14.1392134831 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 12.1639044944 75% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

This E-reader is really disheartening. Please leave comments on what I didoaky while leaving comments on where i should improve. Like this essay, i followed the pattern. topic+ reason+ example. Also, as far as i know, it is totally fine to use personal experience, which inevitably requires pronouns (one issue based on the e-grader). Also, what is with the readability? and is wrong with more content? oI am really confused.

The readability is low because of personal experience. So try to use more general examples in next essays.

also try to put less content. For issue essays, around 450 words, for argument essays, around 400 words.

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The flaws/solutions are given below.

flaws:
1. Don't use personal experience as examples

2. Don't try to argue two sides. Only support/against one side but compare two sides. like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

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How to find those reasons? We may consider TLPE:

T means Time: put the argument on a history background to check out it is correct or not.

L means Location: test the argument on different locations/countries/regions.

P means People: test the argument on people.

E means Event: for example, events because of Hi-Tech or Internet...

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 37 15
No. of Words: 616 350
No. of Characters: 2731 1500
No. of Different Words: 277 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.982 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.433 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.522 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.649 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.118 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.676 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.25 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.403 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

Thank you very much for the comments. I have a couple of questions here: 1. Why personal examples are not okay? 2: I think I didn't argue on both sides. The third paragraph of the body part was a concession paragraph where I mention the part which seems to be reasonable but point out that I still take the opposite site for certain reasons. Am I correct? Thank you.

1. When personal experiences are used, most likely you are going to use pronouns as subject of sentences and use pretty simple sentences. The e-grader will consider you are a student in a lower grader of high school. Then the readabilities will be low.

2. Yes, you can use concession paragraphs. There is no problem. But the concession is not obviously, and we also thought that the example was not exactly true. Most people will pick up the first or second answer for sure, they are not going to think which to pick up, or pick up randomly. However, the mark should be higher than 3.0 if we consider the example is correct.